Perception.

The world is built on a pile of perceptions.
For instance,
my world has the---
Perception that it's worth it,
all this, all these hallucinations what we experience everyday
Because metaphorically this is all we live for.
Because it maybe chaotic but it's beautiful.
Perception that without it
Our lives would probably be more monotonous.
Perception that to survive beautifully in this one life we have,
We have to create a world of our own.
Perception that all we are metaphors of what we try to become of ourselves
That living is difficult unless you built a world of your own
That perhaps, there is no real existence.
Perception that there's a difference between
Carefree life and living carelessly.
Perception that it's better to not expect anything from humans
Perception that it's ironic to blame our perceptions when anything goes wrong.
Perception that the limerences fade but the lacuna doesn't.
Perception that your soul is amaranthine.
All we do is but an outcome of our perceptions.
Our reality is the way we perceive it, the way we react to every thing.
And that, is the point.
Our perceptions control us.
Our worlds are built on piles of perceptions.
And when something goes beyond the vicinity of our thinking,
We perceive that it's our fault, without having perseverance,
Not realizing the fact that it's okay to not perceive something in the right way.

Author's Note

How well does it flow?
What changes should I make?

Reviews

[JayG]

First, a sort of philosophical question: Does breaking an essay into short lines make it poetry? Does pulling out words (the ones I placed in parentheses) do that? Look at the opening before it's sliced into lines:
- - - - -
The world is built on a pile of perceptions. For instance, my world has the perception that it's worth it, all this, all these hallucinations what we experience everyday.

Because metaphorically this is all we live for; because it may be chaotic but it's beautiful; (the) perception that without it our lives would probably be more monotonous; (the) perception that to survive beautifully in this one life we have, we have to create a world of our own; (the) perception that all we are (is) metaphors of what we try to become of ourselves—that living is difficult unless (we)you built(d) a world of (our)your own…
- - - - - -

Without a lyrical quality when read aloud, is it poetry, or a personal manifesto?

But that aside, when you say, “For instance, my world has the perception that it's worth it, all this, all these hallucinations what we experience everyday.” What can it mean to anyone other than yourself? I know not the first thing about “your world.” So I’ll have no context for what the “it’s,” represent in “it’s worth” or in “worth it.” And given that, what can “all this,” mean to me?

You have context to make it meaningful, but shouldn’t the one it’s written for know? I have no “daily hallucinations” that I know of. And I’m pretty certain that I’m not a metaphor. Remember, your intent for the meaning of the words never makes it past the keyboard. You’re not there to explain when it’s read, so all the reader has is what the words suggest to THEM, based on THEIR background, experience, and cultural reference points. So you either call up references they do have or supply them as inherent context through the words you select. Lacking them...

It’s not a matter of talent, or good/bad writing, it’s that the tricks of the trade of both fiction and poetry are not taught in our schooldays, so a bit of digging into them would be time well spent.

[burntwounds]

Thank you very much for reviewing this. It was much needed.
And no, the breaking of lines doesn't make it poetry. And I never stated that it is. I had put it under the category of Story.

[Rye]

I really like this write, I don't see anything you need to change. I like this it's powerful