maybe, just maybe

maybe, just maybe

A Poem by burning paper planes
"

about you.

"
this is me noticing the way you havnt shaved
and the badge on your chest
{although you cant play anymore}
this is me seeing your knuckles 
and the necklace hanging just to the left
{yingyang, your missing a bead}
this is me hearing your heartbeat 
and knowing how comic sans MS should read
{because sometimes you need a keyboard to say it}
this is me tasting roll-your-own
and this mornings coffee-milk-two-sugars on your lips
{you promise to give up, your doing ok}
this is me smelling your aftershave 
{i know you havnt shaved}
and fresh air and mud on your top
{you havnt played in that team for years}
and this is me realising that yeah,
maybe i do love you.

© 2010 burning paper planes


Author's Note

burning paper planes
does the repation work or not? please?

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I really like this. The repetition is great, it makes it interesting. Just a minor thing: you used the wrong "your"; it should be "you're doing ok" and "you're missing a bead" . And it's "haven't"

Posted 14 Years Ago



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burning paper planes
burning paper planes

Preston, Lancs, United Kingdom



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i've been told my words are beautiful i've been told that they make people cry therefore id like you to read something and give a second to tell me why thankyou more..

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