Suffocate

Suffocate

A Poem by Ruminating Archaeologist
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written on 2/10/12 and not easy to get what I'm meaning. can be completely misconstrued.

"
they always leave me in the end,
you'll always leave me in the end,
please don't leave me alone here
you'll always leave me, won't you?

are we always playing games
of back and forth, I'm confused,
aren't we supposed to
talk about and over things?

I know this isn't the end
but if it's you or me I think I'd
go first
it would make sense
I promise I'm not just selfish
I just think that maybe you could
live without me when I can't

© 2012 Ruminating Archaeologist


Author's Note

Ruminating Archaeologist
should I switch the "won't you?" to the first you'll or leave it at the second?
is it too scattered? does it need to be refined or extended?
the final line doesnt end in "live without you". it's more "live" in general.
pic is Monster Hospital by forgottenx -> http://forgottenx.deviantart.com/art/monster-hospital-160426819?q=sort%3Atime%20favby%3Afaydescape&qo=1070

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Added on February 19, 2012
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Ruminating Archaeologist
Ruminating Archaeologist

Paradoxical Cerebrum, IN



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Since 8th grade, I've been writing and I honestly can say I've improved. My deviant art account is normally where I'm stationed, and I use it frequently. I also have a fanfiction.net account, and I'm .. more..

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