The suicidal girl

The suicidal girl

                           Lois j. Biddle

                                                02-06-2016

One morning the girl awoke out of bed and thought to herself,wondering if it was worth getting out of bed that day she looked around turned toward the door and said im sorry and goodbye. Later that night she grabbed the orange bottle of pills pouring the pills down her throat till there weren't any more left. While she laying there overdosing her mom burst in the door,her mother looking at the child she raised just laying there cold, as her soul starts to leave her body she watching her mother calling 911 while shes screaming, the girl is barely alive.They are rushing her to the hospital but by that time.. The girl was gone. Her mom sitting there crying never knowing she was depressed. Suicide is serious.Suicide isn't a joke.

Reviews

[SceTchVine]

maybe if you had better grammar and used quotes it would be more meaningful. If you said that:

Her heart pounded, tears ran down her scarred cheeks.

"I'm sorry." She managed. "Goodbye."

Then with sudden movement she ripped open the container and began swallowing the pills inside until she almost choked.

Anyway, you get the point. And end it with a serious statement, no grammar mistakes. But, I like your intentions. It is very meaningful anyway and you should keep it up :)