Emptiness

A piece of spoken word/poetry showing how i was feeling one evening...

Emptiness

Emptiness engulfs me like thick tar

sticky, gripping, holding, pulling

calling, comforting, like an old friend

amazing how it tempts me in

so what's this all about?

self destruction, masochism?

why destroy when we could create

this feeling inside, is it innate?

fighting, controlling, always rolling

speak the truth, no time for bowling

so i face my fear, shake it's hand

and sail freely around this land

to free ourselves we have to die

give in to life and breathe a sigh

f**k the corporate towers in the sky

i've had enough of society's lie

'cos being good ain't the way

now it's time to have my say

so cut the crap and pour a drink

while we sit back and have a think

Reviews

[Yellow Butterfly]

I'm not sure whats worse...the feeling of emptiness or the sadness of loneliness..

which ever people decide it doesn't change who we are inside as a person...

Sometimes we just need to be heard.......

:O)

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sublime ...musings of the mind..

[Marie Harrison]

Wow, I love this! wonderful poem. I must say I agree. I'll pull up a chair and have a cheery drink with you. My favorite line was "To free ourselves we have to die, give in to life and breathe a sigh, f**k the corporate towers in the sky, I've had enough of society's lie.

Fabulous write.

[Aven]

these are emotions we have all dealt with... this is why poetry exists. :)

[Jacqueline Lopez]

Wow!!! I love this piece because number one it speaks the truth and number two the lines f*uck the coorporate towers in the sky i've had enough of society's lie In simple words, the whole ending to the poem is what can I say, WOW!!!

[alan khan]

you do a good job of sending across what your saying and feeling to the reader...and you do it with balls. not with a whiney voice. i enjoyed this. great last two lines. great overall

[TessaLee]

I do think Poetry Expresses Maybe sadness, or "Emptiness".
I basically Knew all about that stuff but you interested me...

[Emily B]

welcome to the cafe, looking forward to reading more of your thoughts