Elegance

Elegance

A Poem by Buddhistboy73

Elegance personified, we ease ourselves into a roadside bistro
Sunlight shrinking your hazel flecked pupils
Our souls interlacing thier tendrils
Reeling from this rushing ecstacy of nirvana

We exchange lace tinted glances whilst holding hands
Across a thousand mile divide, we still connect
For it's moments like these miracles happen
And to think it's only 3 weeks since we met

Yet like snow coloured swans we're forever mated
Joined together as one beneath azure framed skies
You order the steak - rare with iced water
And I slip inside you and concur

For this day has no beginning and no end
Two souls sowing their vision of hope
Writing their screenplay in droplets of love
On tissue thin paper blessed from above

© 2013 Buddhistboy73


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Really good. I love the hazel flecked pupils line. I only dislike the 'slip inside you and concur' because 'concur' - I don't know, they agree what exactly? The line is crude compared to the beauty and depth of the rest of the poem, like the swans.

Posted 10 Years Ago


Beautiful sweet Poet! Such tenderness in you voice. I love it!

Posted 10 Years Ago


Very interesting, I like it!

Posted 11 Years Ago


Simply enchanting. "Two souls sowing their vision of hope"- lovely words! :)

Posted 11 Years Ago


Buddhistboy73

11 Years Ago

Many Thanks Quill....
'tis appreciated..:)
BB
beautiful. nice word choices and imagery.

Thank you,
Jen

Posted 11 Years Ago


Buddhistboy73

11 Years Ago

Hey Jen,
Thanks for stopping by....:) And glad you enjoyed the poem.....:)
I'll check yo.. read more
This poem and Waves I now have read, they both are written in a major key, and it impresses me, and that is my very positive response!

Posted 11 Years Ago


Buddhistboy73

11 Years Ago

Hey Sasha. Thank You for stopping by to review my poem. I'm not sure what it means major key, but gl.. read more
Such a perfect way of penning the joining of two souls. I love the part where you write about it only being 3 weeks since we met, because I believe that when two people are truly connected time has no boundary. There is a palpable emotional quality to this write that really got to the heart of me. The imagery is fantastic, and the flow was amazing. Nicely done!

Posted 11 Years Ago


Buddhistboy73

11 Years Ago

Thank You my friend...:)
What is with you and lace? Just askin.... INTERLACING, LACE.... it is also in your poem good evening sugar.... ;)

Makes me ponder the significance of lace in our culture... Both as fashion and decor.

:D

Posted 11 Years Ago


Buddhistboy73

11 Years Ago

Hey DaniElle....many thanks for your lacy review....:) And I hope that your worktop is resplendent w.. read more
DaniElle LaPointe

11 Years Ago

Worktop.... Lol. :D
Buddhistboy73

11 Years Ago

Well, let me know if you fancy popping over for a glass of finest chardonnay...;)
long flight .. read more
Wow. This is passion, pain, love's expectation all in one. The bittersweet honeymoon stage of new love... nothing can beat it.

Enjoyed this piece, Sir.

Posted 11 Years Ago


Buddhistboy73

11 Years Ago

Thanks my friend. It was an enjoyable write too.

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Hi all. I live on the edge of London, England, and struggle with the world in my own unique way. I have always written since I was a kid, and use it like my therapy still..... more..

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