Martyr, Martyr, Martyr

I think it's a tad dark. I'm not this guy. If this poem relates to you, I hope you have someone to talk to. If you don't, let me know. Anyway, Enjoy!

Superficial 
Sacrificial 
Gonna martyr, martyr, martyr today
I had enough of your bullshit
Enough of your temperment
Too many demons to slay...

Tired of this life?
Take it with a knife.
You know I just don't care anymore..
Because I try try try..
Keep you from dying
It just isn't worth it anymore.

Even though you're loving it
I see past the bullshit
You sit there and stare some more..
Never seen this side of me
Not holding back anymore...
Cause you're..

Superficial
Sacrificial
Self destruction is your game...
Cause you martyr, martyr, martyr..
and its getting a little harder..
Sacrifices in your name..

People see it coming
They see it and they're running..
No confidence on your side..
Cause you think you're the one
And they know you're done
Tired of your life-long water slide..

Cause youre
Metamorphic
Non-Conformist 
I see you running to the masses who wear black..
I know you
Don't know, but you really shouldn't go
and I'm not gonna hold you back.

Author's Note

What do you think?

Reviews

[sammie bagley]

i liked your poem

[Quintessential]

Beautiful.

[Ian]

Very well done.

[A.Lee]

Wow.. I like this poem particularly because I've been there. But not as the narrator, as the martyr. It took a long time and a lot of people saying "enough is enough". Well written piece of work. I agree with Nydia that it sounds lyrical. I too could hear it being an alternative rock song.

[Nyida Strong]

It's almost lyrical. I can hear this as a song from an alternative rock band... heavy on the bass. I enjoyed reading this as you played it out. Wanting to save the martyr but if they don't want to be saved... nothing you can do but wash your hands of the whole stinking thing. Very well written.

[Through the Gateway]

Wow. I see you've been on the path of trying to save a self-martyrer before. I can feel your tired frustration and anger as you finally say, "Enough is enough."

Well written!

[Sarah Marie]

great use of words and great form but i want more emotion. even though you said that this is you, i want you to put yourself in the mindset of the person you're talking about. its dark and angry poetry, i really want to feel it.

great work though friend, keep writing!