Skip stop motion detector.

 In this racing mind
of mine 
you find 
Nothing but a question

It asks
for a pass
into another world
maybe another dimension
All it wants 
is to get away
the speeding thoughts
drive it astray
Good and Bad
gone all grey
things aren't easy anymore

Insanity's bind
is taking my mind
and I just might let it
The only thing that keeps me
is the thought that just beats me
Into my own submission

I am human.
I know I am, but why am I feeling pain?
I asked for sunshine, 
and some fine wine.
But all I got was rain.
I try my best to satisfy those
who want to see me succeed..
But their success,
Is my demise..
And if I tell them,
I might get a bad rise.

This is fear my son.
I know it is, but why does it grip me?
All I want is a warm arms to hold me,
a woman to show me..
The way to paradise...

One problem with this..
Whats that?
You missed..
Another can't bring you to happiness..
Just bide your time,
skip out on the wine...
And think instead of getting plastered..
Maybe you see
that the answer you seek..
Lies in you and not another.
 

Reviews

[Wildfleour]

Some excellent points raised here and explored. To me the most poignant lines were:

"All it wants
is to get away
the speeding thoughts
drive it astray
Good and Bad
gone all grey
things aren't easy anymore"

[Emily]

very interesting piece. Well written with the rhyme popping up occasionally and adding to the flow. I like the way you have broken the sentences in a bunch of places -- it makes the reader be forced to read line to line a little faster. It definitely pushes the piece through to completion. The last stanza sums up the piece well and it is a very interesting topic you chose to end with. Very nice work!