No sanctuary

 Fear
its inside you
Like a big splash, plane crash
hide the stash
the cops are coming..
Just relax, 
don't give me away...
sit there quietly, start humming.
Your favorite tune
till springs first bloom
When they go away,
Ill pay
Then we will be on our way
You never knew me
you thought you did...
too bad, so sad
emotions safely hid.

You know where I am
You know what I do
Too bad you dont know
why I'm so blue
I hid the sorrow 
I hid it well
It almost consumed me
Into your brimstone hell
The one you made for yourself.

Watch me build the wall
Watch me build it tall
I build it well, I build it strong
And all you wish is for it to fall
And I knew it all along...

Cause you're too ignorant
Youre too dumb
Your emotional reasoning, 
makes me numb
To your yells and screams
I pay no mind
Refuge in me,
You will not find.

The stoic defender 
no longer in me
Find another janitor
for your discarded feeling
Your jibber jabber bullshit
Will haunt me no more
Just remember my name
Cause I walk through your door
no more

no more sanctuary
no more sanctuary
no more sanctuary
From problems you create
Im not your fixer,
and youre not my partner..
You can keep going,
just try a little harder

To breathe on your own.
 

Author's Note

Another quickie write....
Whatcha think?

Reviews

[samantha]

very well done

[Emily]

I really like your style. I wish that I could free write as well as you do. I like that you are able to put down words in a free write which still tell a cohesive story. There is something so nice about being able to take an idea and express it the way you do. You can call it anything and do anything with it. Your use of free writing makes the piece even more raw and open. I really really liked:

"The stoic defender
no longer in me
Find another janitor
for your discarded feeling"

The whole idea that you are telling this person to go find someone else to pick up their broken feelings. You're telling this person to go and find someone else who cares, or whose job it is to care about discarded and thrown away things. Lovely concept!

I really liked this piece. I'll definitely be reading more!

[Mortricia]

This is a very force-fed poem. I like it.

The writing suggests that you don't want to be the pool at the bottom of the waterfall collecting everyone else's thoughts and feelings; or specifically, one person's emotional turmoil. Nice.

[cest la vie]

I like.. Alot..
edgy, honest and a sort of declaration of"No more mister nice guy for you to kick around". I may be wrong on my take. But, it is well written, flows very smooth and the message is very powerful.

Again, I like..Alot..

[The Wave]

nice!
emotions bled through each word. and you created great imagery throughout.

"To your yells and screams
I pay no mind
Refuge in me,
You will not find."

overall, this is written well. definitely one of my faves.
good job.