Forgive

Forgive

A Poem by Jen


 

Forgive me

I'm sorry

But you know it would happen

You should be fine

We've heard this so many times

Everywhere you go

Every time you hear it

This is how you go

So forgive me

I'm sorry

But this blade in my hand

So sharp and pure

Came down upon me

Pretty it was

Red ribbons

Streaming down my arms

Making lovely doodles

A pool of red

Gleaming in the moonlight

Perfect color

Perfect motion

The red rivers grow and grown

Forming a perfect red disk around me

As my growing pale skin

Is dyed red from

The sweet wine of sin

 

© 2008 Jen


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Jen
sorry if it sucks....

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This don't suck at all, I like how you ended this actually

The red rivers grow and grown
Forming a perfect red disk around me
As my growing pale skin
Is dyed red from
The sweet wine of sin

These lines are wonderful, this poem is.


Posted 15 Years Ago


It doesn't suck at all, hehe! And yes, you do need to spellcheck... but still, I found this poem very beautfiul... and inspiring. The way your writting flows, is fantastic! Great job!

~ Chloe

Posted 15 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

it doesn't suck. it's quite nice actually, very emotional. you should just spellcheck your stuff, before you upload, though. ;)

Posted 15 Years Ago


2 of 2 people found this review constructive.


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Added on December 22, 2008
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