Down And Deep

Not really sure what this came from i just jotted it down.

March to the gallows one by one, then side by side two at a time it’s a crazy ride, but its time. Your number got called, and you got caught up it in all. Any last words any requests, just one is all he ask.

Don’t miss me when im im gone, just move along move away, this is my final scene I take my bow. just leave me here where I lay, cry no tears for me today. bury me down bury me deep, my soul you don’t have to keep.

Live on the edge and burn it at both ends, your crazy trying to pretend, you’ll live long enough to die on your own. It wont be your call when its time to go. So pray for your life at the end of the night, but with your last words youll still say

Don’t miss me when im im gone, just move along move away, this is my final scene I take my bow. just leave me here where I lay, cry no tears for me today. bury me down bury me deep, my soul you don’t have to keep.

Because you wanted to be a rebel without a cause, you wanted your life to be a movie but it was stuck on pause. But don’t worry they’ll bury you deep, but forget your last wish cause your soul the demons will always keep.

Author's Note

Let me know what you think and if anything stands out. There may be some grammar issues please ignore them if you can.
Thanks,
Brandon

Reviews

[Stef Outsiders]

I'm quite happy to ignore grammar because it is not all about grammar, it's about how you feel and getting it on paper (or screen) I really like this, rhythmic defiantly. I am so use to poetry centered but this (for me) takes the edge of things.
Splendid write!!

[NoneOfYourBusiness akaK..]

this has the rhythmic feel of a march~ there's a pattern to the cadentic movement and meter that almost begs it to march down the page~ like this


March!
to the gallows
one
by one
side by side
two at a time
it’s a crazy ride!
but its time
Your number
called,
caught up it in all.
Any last words?
any requests?
One is all he asks . . .



this is a completely friendly and simply perception oriented reshaping of your words on my part~ the substance stays the same~ when I read this poem this is how the sentences rearrange themselves and some words fall off to imbue the essence~ well expressed subject matter~ =)~