Treasure

A treasure is unlike a present

Because it is not simply handed to you

It is a rare and valuable reward

That you must spend time and energy to pursue

And once you've sought out and

Acquired your gem that sparkle and glow

You must take care and protect your treasure

In something hidden such as a trove

In this trove she'll sit and wait

To be gazed upon and loved

Just make sure to appreciate her

Or else she'll escape and fly away like a dove

See, a treasure trove is like a safe

And not like a cage or a drawer

You must take out your treasure sometimes for show

And admire her all the more

Author's Note

Just a little something to get my writing gears going. Quick little piece I wrote up today. Everyday I am going to challenge myself to write something to get back into the wing of things. I suffer from chronic writer's block so I usually don't write unless I feel utterly and urgently inspired.

Reviews

[Wonderland Asylum]

I love the simplicity of the


words that you use here. Very simple, but the way you chose to place these words, makes a beautiful impact of the meaning, and creates a gorgeous picture.

"Acquired your gem that sparkle and glow
You must take care and protect your treasure"

These are my favorite lines in the whole poem. Like I stated above, simple yet beautiful.

"In this trove she'll sit and wait
To be gazed upon and loved"

This right here, has so much to say, in only a few words. When I read these lines, I get a sense of sadness and longing, and fragility.

A truly beautiful poem.
Keep writing, I think your becoming one of my favorite writers.

[E.A. Spain]

wow im really flattered to be one of your favorite writers. i truly appreciate your feedback!

[Dinesh Kumar]

nicely written really enjoyed reading

[sette]

so true a treasure is not something can be bought from a store, there is a deeper value attached to it.

[conversations with her ..]

I really enjoyed this poem, and I’m looking forward to reading more of your pieces. I'm kind of new on here and it would be an honor if you can review my 4 new recent poems. (The world is ours, Nostalgia, Paradise, and You)

Thank you and Keep up the Good work!

[Coyote Poetry]

I agree dear Poet. Your words gentle, true and wonderful. I liked the flow of thoughts leading to a perfect ending. Thank you for sharing the amazing poetry.
Coyote

[Dianne S Penfold]

I feel like a dragon reading this. Wanting to admire my stash of gold.

[R.E. Ray]

A simple and pure poem that distinguishes clearly between "treasure" and "present." I like the distinctions you bring out in each stanza. I found your second to last line intriguing. "You must take out your treasure sometimes for show." Seems like you might be saying sometimes these "treasures" (could be a man or woman, I suppose) are merely objects to "admire" (versus love). You'd be right, I believe. Perhaps I'm reading more deeply than intended. Another good write from you.

[BlackPrince]

This poem is wonderfully written with good ideas about what a treasure is supposed to be as compared to a present.

But I notice that in the second stanza 'glow' and 'trove' don't necessarily rhyme, although I know that phonetically the sound (assonance) is near enough, if that is your desired effect. I only point this out simply because you clearly set a standard rhyme scheme for the poem.

I'm a fan of yours and a fellow poet with good intentions to help fellow writers grow.

WELL DONE

[Levi Levin]

A great simple piece of poetry. Makes sense unlike so many that do not!