Dark Place

I believe that some of the best art

Comes from a dark place

Not sure what I look like in your eyes,

But clouds inhabit my space

It’s been some time since I felt the heat

And the walls closing in are cold and bleak

Every time that I arise and look up to the morn,

All I find is leery signs and others of forlorn

I was ravished by the wind

And beaten by the rain

I had given it my all and still had nothing to gain

I found peace and I’ve lost it before

He showed me the truth and I’ve only craved more

I found peace once by the pond

With the bees circling in the valley

But even that dissolved once we strolled into saturated alley

Well where did I go?

Where did he lead me?

If I had the chance to tell you...

You wouldn’t believe me

I was ravished by the wind

And washed down with the rain

I know how hard work is to bring success

But all that love results in, is pain

I know that every time is different

But you’re always left feeling the same

With no one else but you and yourself to blame

Alone in the well is where I was left to wither and wane

I hope they’ll be coming for me finally

As I can now feel the pressure

But the light in me is reminding...

That it is the only thing that holds me together

Author's Note

Written on November 1, 2017.

Reviews

[BlackPrince]

'I found peace once by the pond
with the bees circling in the valley,
but even that dissolved once we strolled into saturated alley.'

Wow! What an image, a paradox, a contrast, simply and touchingly put together!

PLEASE KEEP WRITING AND TAKE YOUR WORK VERY SERIOUSLY AND DATE IT.

You touch my soul.

WELL DONE

[R.E. Ray]

A well-written, original work that artfully conveys not only pain and despair but also hope (i.e., "light" reference). I would certainly keep the last stanza. Just get rid of the line break and the note. It's a good ending to this poem. Nice work, E.A. I look forward to reading more.

[Travis Gibson (poetic h..]

Enjoyed this... The final or "additional," stanza fits very well. Gives it a complete feel and ends it with a hopeful tone. It allows the reader to digest this in a multitude of ways.

[lessa (kenzie)]

I like your last stanza, holds a summary.
Very nicely written