The Next Day's Tomorrow

Just a write. Nothing AMAZING *shrug*

I fall into this valley of sorrow.

I attempt to make myself fly,

But I'm only brought down by,

The next day's tomorrow.

 

I lift myself out of my bed,

I attempt to make myself rise,

But then I look out my window,

And hear a blue bird as it cries,

And then I remember what I had said.

 

I had said to her,

"Babe, you're beautiful."

And it made me wonder why,

Her mother disagrees.

I want to make my babe cheerful,

But her mom just makes it a blur.

 

The blur has fogged my babe's mirror.

What she now sees in that mirror,

Is something that I have never seen.

That something, is someone, that is overweight.

It kills me knowing that she thinks this way.

Oh how I want that mirror to get clearer,

Oh, how I want that mirror to get clearer..

 

So this valley of sorrow,

The next day's tomorrow,

The blue bird as it cries,

The blur of a mother,

The fogged mirror,

Are all only as good as

The last day's yesterday.

The one filled with sorrow.

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

Author's Note

I honestly don't even know if this makes sense.
I just wrote it to write it.
Leave your comments if you want
I wont mind
I'm in a careless kind of mood right now
aha

Reviews

[Lydia]

I like this poem. I think it could use a little editing with word choices and comma usages (they're not always necessary :P ) but other than that I enjoyed it.

Thanks for your review. I had meant to expand that poem but every time I looked at it, it didn't say anything back, so I left it. I'm glad you liked it.

[jessfoundwonder]

it's kind of scattered, i guess.
but it also makes sense in a weird sort of way.
i guess i probably don't like it as much because i can't relate to it.

[Lillian]

This makes me feel all blue inside. =(

haha nice write for being "written for he sake of writing." I thinkyou should take it appart and make a new draft. This is wicked good material to work off of. =)

[Lottie]

Honestly u mke it seem as if ur speaking from experience... i really like this poem its well written and captures me... altho sense 2 me my nt b the same as most lol! Thanks for sharing beautiful poem:)