Make Sense Wise Creatures

With a drop of water,
      the ocean was formed.
With a handful of soil,
      the Earth was born.

With a piece of seed,
      Forest existed.
With a mistake of man,
      All these were lost out of the blue.

Can't we get the point?
      The point I'm stating with this piece?
Can't we understand?
      Understand that Earth is a home of bliss?

Ocean was formed by drops.
Earth by a handful of soil.
Forest with a piece of seed.
And man by all our mistakes?

God created humankind,
      the wisest and greatest creature.
But we're not acting like one.
      One who are called to be the stewards of all those creations.

Look around and think.
      Is that what we need?
      Or it's what we deserve?
'Cause all I see is hopelessness.

"Experience is the best teacher."
      But remember my fellowmen,
      Experiences were part of the past.
Are we going to wait for the Earth's destruction before we learn?

MAKE SENSE WISE CREATURES.


-bryandc15

Author's Note

Kung 'di tayo, sino pa? Kung 'di ngayon, kelan pa?

LET'S MOVE FOR OUR OWN GOOD. Save the world. Save humankind. Save yourself.

Reviews

[KAOlmsted]

Meh, I'm not a huge fan of this preachy poetry that basically says I am a despicable human being just because I drive a car or whatever. Thanks for sharing it, though.

[Taylor Swit]

Correct. This is a good piece also. Nature lover din ako. :)

[PaperLife]

As your words pattern a world of life in your poem I can imagine being there at the beginning. The smell of life beginning... the beauty. The imagery is so beautiful. I sink and fade into your poem. The meaning is so bold and true. If only people listened. For the beauty of your words is truly enough to make life open back up again. See... feel... hear. Understand. Your words are touching, feeling, passionate beautiful. You capture the REAL world again in your beautiful words. It's amazing how you play together beautiful words, and then also allow us to feel the pain of needing to change our ways. Beautiful... well written. :) I love it.

[bryandc15]

Thank you.

[chuna]

gayun sana!
from the very catchy title to the very advisable conclusion..
I love the piece...
go green!!

[bryandc15]

Thank you.

[chuna]

no problem...
by the way, have you seen cathy gayun?

[bryandc15]

yeah ... She's just behind me sitting in front of comp.

[Jess]

ansabeeee!!!anyway,GOOD JOB bry!keep it up

[bryandc15]

Thanks.

[AWickedMoon]

I may not agree with you on how the earth was, made but I can agree with the fact that we humans are the reason behind the pain and suffering of many creature's and plant's suffering. This was a great poem that helps bring topics to light. Thank you for sharing! :)

If you’re interested I’m having a contest "Change The World” I would love for you to enter your opinion. :)

[bryandc15]

My pieces aren't fitting to your contest. The genre of this poem is poetry.
Thank you for the review btw.

[AWickedMoon]

Hm lemme go fix that! :)

[CecilA]

bryan,

Nicely composed and written. ? did you mean "Earth's destruction" instead of "distraction"

I agree with you and Kurkota that we need to live as minimal as possible to conserve our God given resources. So your message is timely and poignant. Keep up the good work.

Thanks for sharing this poem with us.

Cecil

[bryandc15]

Thank you. Sorry for that error. I'll Fix it right now.

[gombeggar]

very nice

[Darkening Shadow]

Great Job! I liked how your repeated some things. Great Write!

[Rhianne Ney]

God created humankind,
the wisest and greatest creature.
But we're not acting like one.
One who are called to be the stewards of all those creations.

Look around and think.
Is that what we need?
Or it's what we deserve?
'Cause all I see is hopelessness.

"Experience is the best teacher."
But remember my fellowmen,
Experiences were part of the past.
Are we going to wait for the Earth's distraction before we learn?

This are the powerful lines that you've stated here, dude~! Good job