I'm not alone

True Happiness is measured not
with the acquisition of luxuries we want.
True Happiness is measured not
with the power which everyone desires.

The bliss I had
passed for good.
When sorrow found me
and stayed too long.

Four corners of the room
summoned as my witnesses.
With this terrible sadness
And unending loneliness.

Tomorrow is not
another day to meet.
For this sorrowful night
doesn't seem to leave.

Since then, I've thought
I'm not alone
But eventually I saw,
I was living on my own.

This dark sadness I feel,
hindered the reality.
I'm not alone
God is with me.

Author's Note

I wrote this piece while I'm in my room last night, alone. Then suddenly I thought "Where are everyone?" "Am I alone?" "Did they abandoned me?" . Then, out of the blue I realized " I'm Not " "They didn't" "Someone's around for me" .

Reviews

[chuna]

pretty good,,,
I wish I'm not alone...

keep up the good works!

[bryandc15]

work-s????? Grabe man ...... Kasupog man ..... Saro-saro sana ... maluya an kalaban ... Work lang .. haha ... peace:) (^_^)V

[chuna]

okay...
saro pa lang palan ang ginibu mo...????

keep up the good work!

[bryandc15]

hahahahahahaaahhhahahahahahaahhLOL

[chuna]

"happiness is contentment"

[Taylor H.]

Nice way of thinking. Its good to never feel alone.

[CecilA]

brydanc,

Well written for a first draft; spur of the moment.

Suggestions:

"The bliss I had
passed for good
when sorrow found me
and stayed too long."

"Four corners of the room
summoned as my witnesses -"

"Since then I've thought,
I'm not alone."

"The dark sadness I felt,
hindered the reality
I was not alone
God was with me."


You need to pick a verb tense. What I showed is past tense as I perceived you want.

I'm not certain what you mean by: "But eventually I saw, I was not living (? with) on my own."

I believe you get my point.

Thanks for sharing this insightful poem.

[bryandc15]

thanks for this suggestions .... I'll fix this piece immediately ....

[Andrew (MJ) Nugteren]

wow this is nice. is this related to my poem "you are not alone" lolz. anyways i really liked it 100/100