The Grandeur that was the Smallest

a poem....

Things so great are often appreciated.
Things too broad seemed more amazing.
Things as huge as universe are considered grandeur.
And things as wide as the space are more significant.
           However, things like those were nothing.
           Nothing but a combination of small uncertainties.
           Nothing but a vague idea without its origin.
A novelty piece is nothing without the paragraphs.
Paragraphs without the words,
and words without the letters.
An award winning movie couldn't had existed
if not of the videos.
Videos if not of the pictures,
and pictures if not of dots.
Without the cost of a note,
there's not a single note phrase.
And without a note phrase,
there's not a simple music composition.
If not because of sperm and egg cell,
there's not a single human being,
an animal in this world.
And the great universe wouldn't be as huge as it is
if not because of atoms.
           Small things rarely recognized.
           Small things rarely understood.
           And small things rarely appreciated.
           Yet small things as this,
           had been the start of all great matters.
           Thus, making those small things
           not as magnificent as universe.
           But as great as the tiniest thing in the world.
           Perhaps, It'll be best to call those...
           "Great small things".

Author's Note

thanks for reading.... whats your comment????

Reviews

[chuna]

i really love this poem!
"the smallest wonder ca inspire the greatest ideas" [that's my motto]
very good job!

[bryandc15]

Thanks:)

[lee von cleef]

and her we go carrying water molecules from there to here

[mhaie]

nice.

[KurKota]

I offer a large compliment on your writing with a group of small words Very nice !

[bryandc15]

Great, what does the adjective great meant for you?
Small, how do you describe small?

[CecilA]

Bryandc15,

This poem has great promise. It is well thought out, profound and relevent to a broad audience. I really like it.

I know it's difficult to write in English if that isn't your primary language. Some of the words are difficult to interpret. But you've done well. There just a few which I suggest you consider changing.

Suggestions:

Great things are often over desired
Extraodinary things seem more amazing
Things as immense as the universe are considered grandeur
And things as deep as space appear more significant
However things such as these are nothing but
A combination of small particles mostly unseen
Of which we have only a vague comprehension
Their origin uncertain for some
A novelty text is nothing without paragraphs
Paragraphs without words
Words without letters
An award winning movie couldn't exist
If not for videos
Videos if not for pictures
Pictures if not for dots (or pixels)

And our great universe is composed of
an incalculable quantity of atoms

Atoms:
Small things usually unrecognized
Small things frequently misunderstood
Small things rarely appreciated
Yet small things such as this
Are the essence of all great things
Thus making small things,
Though not as magnificant as the universe
To our finite understanding,
The greatest things in our world
Perhaps it would be best to call them
'Great small things.'

I took the liberty of rewriting parts of your poem according to my interpretation of it not as a correction or the way it should be written. I believe it will help in translating it from your native tongue to English. Plus, I did a few grammer changes. I didn't get into punctuation. Please accept my apology if I have gone overboard. My intent is to help.

Have you seen any of the Hubble telescope photos on the internet? They are breath taking. Perhaps viewing them would augment the reference data for your poem. It might help in your showing part of the poem.

If you have the time, you might want to check into sub atomic particles to see if you would like to include them in your 'Great small things.' As you are aware, atoms are not the smallest particles in the universe. I figured you didn't want to get into physics beyond which your audience would understand. However, protons, neutrons and such are fascinating. It all depends upon your intent.

Thank you for sharing this fascinating poem with us. I look forward to what you think of my suggestions.

Sincerely, Cecil

[Crimson Bayonet]

Nicely put. Awesome job! :)

[KAOlmsted]

Nicely done. Thank you for sharing your rather large thoughts on these great small things ;-)

[bryandc15]

thank you...

[lee von cleef]

Life lives and dies on the smallest of balances....

[bryandc15]

yeah....

[gombeggar]

things so huge as 'a' universe ...me thinks works better

'have' been the start of all great matters

not as magnificent as 'a' universe ...all suggestions

mind u...'universe' does mean singular in it's original context and by definition...but that has changed with the newer concept of the multi-verse and such

now down to the written work itself, i think it is vey well stylized and nicely structured