The Change

A description of a new relationship allowing freedom to the soul ....

I see the face before me

And stop in sheer surprise

How quickly we'd forgotten

The tiredness in your eyes

The change in you remarkable

For now so full of fire

The mind is working brightly

You show so much desire

A vigour in your step

A smile upon your lips

A fire within your belly

A passion in your kiss

The difference so marked

From those dark Christmas days
Such pleasure now I see

In all your lovely ways

So darling we'll continue

To make you laugh much more

Together we will walk

Through that happy door

And stride away as one

Fulfilling all our dreams

For no one else will ever match

The love we share... supreme
For all our lives we'll share

The pleasure we inspire

In each of us together

Such passionate desire

 

Phil Sanders

15/7/08

 

Reviews

[Gary H]

I like this Phil. It's a very good moving on into a new life poem. There is one line however that confuses me. This is 'How quickly we'd forgotten' which I read more in the context of 'I'd forgotten' rather than 'we'. I think thisis because the words are 'you' and 'I' until around the middle part where 'we' becomes one.

[Adam Whitworth]

good news for a change, im glad to hear it, nice poem Phil

[Beautifully Tragic xPoe..]

Sorry it took me so long to review this. Very beautiful, romantic write.

[Chelsea Hawkins]

Very beautiful, very romantic, as any poem such as this should be. My favorite was the last, "For all our lives we'll share the pleasure we inspire, in each of us together such passionate desire." I love it. Keep up the good writing!

[Brenda Sue]

Wonderfully penned, Phil. Very nicely done. You can always capture the romance in your words.

[Donna DeLong Matthews a..]

Beautiful Beautiful write... Ahhhh Time can be a double edge sword as there are times it works for us
and others it works against us but one thing we can count on is ... It does forever march on...
Phil I really enjoyd this...
Hugs
Donna

[jen -- JG]

Nicely done Phil. Time does heal and when the heart is ready it sees with new eyes.

Cheers

Jen

[Catrinka]

Lovely! You accurately capture the rejuvination of a new relationship - kudos!

Sorry it took me so long to review - I had to go out of town for work the last three weeks out of four, so it's been pretty crazy, but I"m back now -

[An Ordinary Woman]

Beautiful. I miss you but am SO happy that your doing better. :+))

[Poeticme]

very nicely written....I really enjoyed reading this...very calming words....TY for sharing and TY for reading my work..TC and have a great week:-)