Aching Without You

Missing my love .....

What do I miss? – I miss your smile

That lights the world and does beguile

I miss your feet .. such elegance

And as I hear .. I turn and glance

I miss your laughter .. billowing round

Such happiness .. a joyous sound

I miss your touch .. so soft and true

Another reason .. I LOVE YOU

I miss your kiss … that stops me dead

It fills my soul and spins my head

I miss the chance to hold you tight

And see those eyes .. a wondrous sight

I miss your silent, tender ways

As all I do ….is ache for days

I miss your spirit … wild and free

It always does encompass me

I miss your love .. so full and deep

I cry at night before I sleep

But most of all.. I miss my life

For it is you .. and sadness rife

 

Phil Sanders

19/3/08

Reviews

[LilyGrace]

A couple of lines could do with some tweaking perhaps, such as the 'Another reason .. I LOVE YOU' which just makes it seem a little amateur, which is a shame when the rest is so beautifully written... Having said that, the innocence of love? I don't know, just a personal reaction. Some of these lines are beautiful -

'I miss your kiss � that stops me dead
It fills my soul and spins my head
I miss the chance to hold you tight
And see those eyes .. a wondrous sight'

is just a lovely quartet, and the first two lines are wonderful, brilliantly written. In all, a great write.
LGD

[Sha*Z*ta]

Nice flow of words and a wonderful expression of love that is sometimes lost

[Yemaya Theresa]

I really like the flow of this. I can almost hear it in song. Lovely.