Aching Without You

Missing my love .....

What do I miss? – I miss your smile

That lights the world and does beguile

I miss your feet .. such elegance

And as I hear .. I turn and glance

I miss your laughter .. billowing round

Such happiness .. a joyous sound

I miss your touch .. so soft and true

Another reason .. I LOVE YOU

I miss your kiss … that stops me dead

It fills my soul and spins my head

I miss the chance to hold you tight

And see those eyes .. a wondrous sight

I miss your silent, tender ways

As all I do ….is ache for days

I miss your spirit … wild and free

It always does encompass me

I miss your love .. so full and deep

I cry at night before I sleep

But most of all.. I miss my life

For it is you .. and sadness rife

 

Phil Sanders

19/3/08

Reviews

[LilyGrace]

A couple of lines could do with some tweaking perhaps, such as the 'Another reason .. I LOVE YOU' which just makes it seem a little amateur, which is a shame when the rest is so beautifully written... Having said that, the innocence of love? I don't know, just a personal reaction. Some of these lines are beautiful -

'I miss your kiss � that stops me dead
It fills my soul and spins my head
I miss the chance to hold you tight
And see those eyes .. a wondrous sight'

is just a lovely quartet, and the first two lines are wonderful, brilliantly written. In all, a great write.
LGD

[Valentine]

Such a beautiful write..I pray this is not about your own life..God bless...Valentine

[Phibby Venable]

Oh, this is very poignant & sad. I like it a great deal.
It is the things that seem to linger afterwards, as though
waiting to be stumbled upon. Excellent.

[Fran Marie]

A very heartfelt write so well expressed~ THanks for sharing~Fran

[Ani Ashford]

Heartfelt and beautifull written. I really feel your pain at the separation. Hope she comes back soon. :) You are a tender soul. So sweet.

[Sally Edwards]

How poignant this is Phil, beautifully written, it makes me sighhhhh at such tender words.

[Nicholas Hallows]

I echo the words of the other reviews. A touching write. NH

[J.P. Bristow]

this was very poignant for me as I lost my fiance' to cancer and I have these moments all the time. A heartbreaking write.

-Jules.

[Brianna Brie]

Pouting after reading "Aching Without You". Why? Because, how I long for him to miss me like this. Your deepest admiration is penned beautifully here.

[Brenda Sue]

Wonderful as always. I agree, I can almost hear a song of this as I read it. Beautifully penned. Great job.