Aching Without You

Missing my love .....

What do I miss? – I miss your smile

That lights the world and does beguile

I miss your feet .. such elegance

And as I hear .. I turn and glance

I miss your laughter .. billowing round

Such happiness .. a joyous sound

I miss your touch .. so soft and true

Another reason .. I LOVE YOU

I miss your kiss … that stops me dead

It fills my soul and spins my head

I miss the chance to hold you tight

And see those eyes .. a wondrous sight

I miss your silent, tender ways

As all I do ….is ache for days

I miss your spirit … wild and free

It always does encompass me

I miss your love .. so full and deep

I cry at night before I sleep

But most of all.. I miss my life

For it is you .. and sadness rife

 

Phil Sanders

19/3/08

Reviews

[LilyGrace]

A couple of lines could do with some tweaking perhaps, such as the 'Another reason .. I LOVE YOU' which just makes it seem a little amateur, which is a shame when the rest is so beautifully written... Having said that, the innocence of love? I don't know, just a personal reaction. Some of these lines are beautiful -

'I miss your kiss � that stops me dead
It fills my soul and spins my head
I miss the chance to hold you tight
And see those eyes .. a wondrous sight'

is just a lovely quartet, and the first two lines are wonderful, brilliantly written. In all, a great write.
LGD

[Candle in the wind]

I don't know perhaps it is providence that I chanced upon this You echoe the anguish in my soul.It is worse when you have to let go and yet you could have held on or perhaps you couldn't. I am too choked to write any more.

[SweetPeachesAlways]

I miss me too...
Great write, Phil!

[None]

This is so very beautiful...true love displayed throughout! I hope you can see each other soon. This is so loving and tender. It's from the heart, I can tell. Beautifully written!

[R J Askew]

Yikes, I almost feel like a 23 year old virgin again reading this! O the aching! The wistful, beautiful aching! To be honest I have forgotten those feelings, but your poem does bring them rushing back! O to be a teenager again snogging in a bus-shelter... now THAT was happiness, and I missed it!

[Catrinka]

Great job at describing emotion - ah, the ups and downs of love, eh? I can reach out and touch the sadness in this poem -

My fave line:
But most of all.. I miss my life For it is you - Beautifully written and exactly how I feel about my man...hope you and your love get to be together all the time soon

[Gary H]

I read this first thing in the morning when my dearest is out of contact for a few days. Obviously that meant the impact was significant on me, particularly the first line - something that has been lost since the IM webcam broke. But I hold feelings in my heart that are deep enough to stop me getting sad. I appreciate your poem though.

[Rain]

I thought it was a beautifully written poem. If you look at love poems they rarely say " I love you" it's I love you like the leaves, love the..yada yada, Good piece. Rain..

[Beautifully Tragic xPoe..]

Beautifully penned. flowed wonderfully, nicely done

Great write.

[Haruki]

How very beautiful. I could feel the sadness and most of us have been there.

[Carole]

You have painted a beautiful picture of your heart felt love for this woman in your life. They say "Absence makes the heart grow fonder." Have you found that to be true? She would be enthralled to read such a heart felt poem and I am sure it would be enamoring to her...Very well executed, Phil. Thanks for sharing.