With Your Winged Chariot

Another transatlantic collaboration with the very talented Brenda Sue

I have been haunted every minute that you've been away,
And time has no meaning till our glorious reunion day.
Our love sweetly echoes the distance to the stars,
Around the sun and moon, then straight to Mars.
The sky is so full of twinkling lights
My loneliness without you a piteous sight
I feel such desolation as I look in the sky
Without you beside me I feel that I will die
Under a crescent moon, so fair and fragile,
Apart from you, everyday is a new struggle.
My soul was lost in time from loving you,
Crossing the distance you came to my rescue.
So with your winged chariot, chase across the sky
Fill my heart with joy as you descend from up on high
Make my love explode with a million kisses sweet
And blow my mind forever as you sweep me off my feet
So as I stand here watching with the stars so bright above
I offer you the world with a galaxy of love

Phil Sanders and Brenda Sue
 

Reviews

[Captain Blackheart (The..]

I have to agree this is a wonderful collaberation. A wonderful and vivid write!

[Lady Of Darkness]

Simply Beautiful

[Pauline Marie Daley]

Its awesome how you likened a never ending love to the glory that is in the galaxy. Awesome job!

[ah]

another great write, thanx again for sharing, keep it up

[Sr.phil]

now and then, i read a poem from you then, and im read one from you now, and still you lack to dissapoint me.

[Sqeaver]

And blow my mind forever as you sweep me off my feet
So as I stand here watching with the stars so bright above
I offer you the world with a galaxy of love

My favorite lines, great vision.

[Carl]

Nice collaberation here. It seems to me to be about someone who has been in love / married and the for some reason they are no longer together. Liked the way you brought space in to the peice. But however big space is it will never be as big as that space that was left by her leaving. Just be careful in future peices the remain in the same tense the whole way through. Time you went away - past tense You came to my rescue - past tense I stand here - present tense I offer you the world Present tense

Apart from that quality write

[PureSyn]

~Clapping~ Such a beautiful, and a delight to the soul collaboration. Your voices blend so well in this piece...as one, now thats perfect! So loved the enchanting imagery!

Nicole

[Catrinka]

Another collaberation, how fun!! This is great you guys, you make a wonderful team! I love the references to the sun, moon, mars, the stars, what great images! This is my favorite part right here:
Our love sweetly echoes the distance to the stars,
Around the sun and moon, then straight to Mars.
The sky is so full of twinkling lights
LOVE IT!

[Gary H]

Very clever and nicely written. Would love to know if the rhymes were easy to come by - did you have a plan? From experience these works are essentially a dream to write with another person and a bonus if anyone else reads and agrees.
I'm reminded of Chitty Chitty Bang Bang with the car picture/winged chariot. There's a great flow about this. Great work.

[Forest Green]

Heartbreak nicely personified. My favorite line was the final one...what an excellent ending to a nice procession of words.

Good work!

Daniel