Moonlight and Progress

Musings .....

Moonlight filters through the window

Fireflies dancing flights of love

As the evening slowly drifting

Shows the silken stars above

Long ago men searched the sky

Seeking thoughts and signs to hold

Waiting then for portents shining

Through the darkened night so bold

As they sailed their flimsy schooners

Round the oceans deep and wide

So the world became much smaller

As great distance they did ride

Then industrial revolution

Opened options never known

Now the world is like a raindrop

Falling freely on seeds sown

Sprouting up ideas like snowflakes

Myriad of thoughts and deeds

Internet and IPod billions

Opening up the chance to read

Where will all this progress lead us?

How will all the changes seem?

Now and then we need to ease down

Let the gentle minds just dream

 

Phil Sanders

3/3/08

Reviews

[Vatsayayana]

Stunning.
Your words evoked a wistful quality.
I remember as a child looking at the stars and wondering. Remembering.
It's amazing what life is. How potent and beautiful.
Yet look at what technology has wrought?
Everything is about balance and nowadays it appears there is none.
But this is stunning, I love how it flows!
Brava!

[jen -- JG]

You have evoked the true meaning of "Time passing" here, Phil. The biggest question is where will it all end?

Will we continue at this fast burn out pace until we we do just that - burn out? Or can we slow it down a little by taking time to dream and breathe.

I wish to take take time and breathe.

Thank you for a timely reminder.

jen-JG

[Michael X]

very nice, calming soothing, relaxing, meditative approach taken phil. i really enjoyed the passionate focus displayed with care, your words paint a picture depicting wisdom, insight, and an underlying sense of subtle foreboding, captivating, i felt my heart drawn to depthful pondering, the moonlight imagery is imaginative and sets one's thoughts adrift in the making, defining the design of your skillfully rendered poem.

[Tania Leigh]

A nice walk through time....I like that you had the poem come full circle with the ending:

"Now and then we need to ease down
Let the gentle minds just dream"

Excellent advice for everyone....great write!

[Kate]

Enchanting, it takes you somewhere else, and then applies it to today. I had a conversation with someone only hours ago about this:

Where will all this progress lead us?
How will all the changes seem?
Now and then we need to ease down
Let the gentle minds just dream

Really intriguing. My favorite lines:

Long ago men searched the sky
Seeking thoughts and signs to hold
Waiting then for portents shining
Through the darkened night so bold
As they sailed their flimsy schooners
Round the oceans deep and wide

You have captured my imagination.

Kate

[PureSyn]

Absolutely a wonderful piece of poetry. I was captivated asI walked with you through your thoughts. everything is moving, turning, growing a fast pace...takes ones breath away at times. You are so right...we do need to slow down...and relish just the dreaming...beautiful!

Nicole

[SweetPeachesAlways]

Sprouting up ideas like snowflakes - quaint...
Let the gentle minds just dream - yes, quite..

very beautiful and well written...

[Carl]

Nice work here. I thought that this maybe a love poem. But i was surprised where this one lead. I liked the last line let gentle minds dream. As poets and writers don't we spend our lives dreaming. Good job sir.

[Beautifully Tragic xPoe..]

Beautifully penned, great imagery and flowed wonderfully.


Great Write.
Rayne

[None]

Very nicely thought out and wonderfully rhymed. What great thought you have here to make all see how it started in a small way and has built and built upon that. I like your title and your poem is clever!