Images of D-Day

My expression of what they must have felt as the invasion started 0n 6th June 1944

Water lapping round the hull

In the false and silent lull

Phoney, peaceful, graceful waves

Just before the dawning day

Flash of lightning across the sky

Deadly, crackling lullaby …

Of tracer ripping through the air

Fatal metal … without care

Tears away the flimsy peace

Everyone so ill at ease

Shattering sounds of earthly hate

All a tremble … What’s our fate?

Plunging through the waves of fear

Fleeting thoughts of those so dear

Feet on terra firma now

Will I once more hold the plough?

Or will I cease to be right here …….

On the sands …. With freedom near

 

Phil Sanders

Reviews

[Catrinka]

What a great capture of what must have been soldiers experiences...the rhythm and rhyme is perfect.
As one who simply can't write a rhyme (at least I haven't yet, and I am over 50 LOL!) I am particularly impressed by your usage of the correct words and that they RHYME. Kudos! I just recently wrote an anti-war poem, I'll send you a read request and you can take a look at it if you'd like.

[Gary H]

This is interesting. Seems like there are two views in this - the first from views of the D Day landings and the second from how we as people stand now -

Just before the dawning day
Flash of lightning across the sky
Shattering sounds of earthly hate
All a tremble � What's our fate?

These lines reminded me of the World Trade Center. I know this was far from your mind but I just picked up on a interesting link between the war past and the one that maybe looms over us.

Well thought out piece.

[Beautifully Tragic xPoe..]

Great imagery, wonderfully penned. Nicely done.


Great Write.

[Sally Edwards]

Beautiful writing, lovely poem short and very thought provoking it certainly made me think of D-day in a different way. I have not considered about it from this POV before....... very poignant

[Carl]

First congrats on a great win on saturday. You know how much it pained me to say that lol. The is a haunting piece. to me it is written possibly by someone in their early teens. Who themselves have not quite grasped the inormitity of the mission at hand. I like the way the poem builds from silently going through the waves. To the first signs of tracer fire.To a footprint on the beach with freedom near. Why did you write this peice now. was it poppys in fields was it through a book or an image whatever it is through you have captured the scene and the fear brilliantly Hats off to you....

[None]

A sad and difficult subject but you came through with a meaningful poem here to help us never forget. I like your rhyming here and the beat it keeps. Very well written.

[R J Askew]

Great job. I always like historic themes and they get no more dramatic than D-day. Hundreds of thousands of men feeling the most intense thoughts that day. 'Plunging through the waves of fear' is the best line for me.

[Brenda Sue]

Very impressive. Wonderfully penned. Great job.