The Silence of the Fog

A gloomy morning now .....

From the brilliance of sunrise

To foggy morning’s gloom

The world is plunged so quickly

Into a darkened tomb

The tug is slowly drifting

Around the river’s side

So silent in the whiteout

As everything does hide

The world is stuck in limbo

Awaiting nature’s breeze

When finally some wind

Will blow through all the trees

Until then apparitions

Appear through murky light

A seagull on the wing

Still able to take flight

A man appears by magic

Like a curtain has been drawn

As quickly down the towpath

He hurries to keep warm

For fog just hangs around you

With a silent fearful dread

And everyone is rushing

To get home and go to bed

 

Phil Sanders

18/2/08

Reviews

[Carl]

Again the traits your renowed for appear in this peice. Nature and the waters edge. First thing in the morning so much going on. The tug the gulls and birds. The man up early going to work or getting the suplies for the day. The peice is serene and peaceful and calm. Nature has a perfect way of waking us up.

[Michael X]

stellar imaginative consistance my friend, i can only admire, you really create an environment
where the readers thoughts can dwell in the theme, i get sharp images combined with sentimental
feeling when i read your words, there is a specific passion to each writing,
the silence and the fog, the last for sentences capture the essence perfectly as your words lead to
the moment of reckoning, drawn inspiration to completion, excellent work phil.

[Valentine]

A very nice write..as rainy as it is across the pond I expect you see fog a lot more than we do here in the hot ..hot..hot 10+ degrre weather in summer..God bless..Valentine

[jen -- JG]

As always Phil another great poem filled with clear imagery, soulful words and a desciption anyone waking to a foggy morning is likely to see. Those who have never experienced this - will do so reading by your poem.

Well done

Jen-JG

[ah]

very very great write, thanx for asking me to read it, keep writing

[Steven Williams]

Great job, Phil. I really enjoy reading your work. Definitely a fan. Keep writing!!

~Stephen

[Lady Of Darkness]

I Love the imagery i got from this piece.
Some words were quite peaceful.
I also liked the descriptions about the seagull about to take flight, and the apparitions, through the murky light
Great work.

[An Ordinary Woman]

There is something so serene about a morning draped in a blanket of fog, something you capture so well here, thx for this...

[R J Askew]

The poem has a natural ballad feel to it with a 7 or 8 syllable line followed by a 6 syllable line. It would read easily and well. And the gloom and slightly sinister feel to it is a sort of ballad subject.

[Amor-de-angel]

The Fog!! I hate the fog...it's like those creepy claws coming to engulf you...
But you turn it into a great poem....well done Kudos