Intimate Evening

A gentle love poem for Valentine's Day ...

The music playing quietly

As in my arms you lay

Such intimate sweet moments

To end the busy day

I stroke your hair so softly

And smell your freshness there

A wondrous slow tranquility

With tenderness we share

Our eyelids getting heavy

As the warmth surrounds us now

We fall asleep as one

Relieving furrowed brows

And when we wake together

With passion we will kiss

A love so deep within us

I feel such gorgeous bliss

Your eyes just melt my heart

Your lips fill me with song

I want to stay here evermore

For all those nights so long

 

Phil

14/2/08

Reviews

[jen -- JG]

Gentle, sweet, passionate and romantic - a truly special poem for a truly special love .
Well done Phil

Jen-JG

[An Ordinary Woman]

Sighs .... How lovely and sweet.

*I stroke your hair so softly* ... I love that notion so much, so gentle, so intimate, just lovely Phil.

[R J Askew]

I like the execution of this, with most of the double lines being ballad 8s and 6s. A few are 7 and 6, but who's counting! Great job. Would read very well aloud.

[Sally Edwards]

Beautiful Phil, now you have captured so perfectly how one would image two people in love would spend this special day............. such a smooth read, romatic and tender

[Lady Of Darkness]

Such a beautiful write.
It flows nicely together.

[Floating on the feather..]

Such a delightful write.... a perfect love poem to write for someone you love the most on Valentine's Day.

Wonderful.