Reflections in Life

Reflections in Life

A Poem by Susan 🦋
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Refined Trijan Refrain

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Each twisting turn in life defined,
bright moments 'oft embraced.
Whence carefree childhood days once shined
of wonders children chased.
Sweet innocence, so soon foregone,
as if a sprinting newborn fawn.
Sweet innocence,
sweet innocence …
time folds upon the breaking dawn.

Life's pendulum so quickly flows
'tween timeless love and grief.
Weaves tapestry of highs 'n lows
in fine-laced golden leaf.
Such worthiness in life, rejoice!
(Dare not, subdue a truthful voice).
Such worthiness,
such worthiness …
a vibrant paradox of choice.

Let it be said, "We choose to love
with whom our pathways cross,
and recognize true grace above,
held tight 'gainst any loss!"
Love overcomes each twisting turn
(God granted wisdom to discern).
Love overcomes,
love overcomes …
a life worth living ~ we all yearn.

© 2023 Susan 🦋


Author's Note

Susan 🦋
Refined Trijan REFRAIN
The Refined Trijan REFRAIN, is an adaptation of the Trijan REFRAIN,
created by Jan Turner, which originally had refrains in L1 in all three verses.
The Refined Trijan REFRAIN consists of three 9-line stanzas, for a total of 27 lines.
The first four syllables of line 5 in each verse
are repeated as the DOUBLE-REFRAIN for lines 7 and 8.
The Trijan Refrain is a rhyming poem with a set meter and a rhyme scheme as follows:
Rhyme scheme: a,b,a,b,c,c,D,D,c
(the REFRAINS are the first 4 syllables of line five).
Meter: 8/6/8/6/8/8/4-4 REFRAINS/8

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This is a great piece of work. A bit melancholy, I think. I'm not so sure about that last part though, "Love overcomes..." Sometimes overcoming is a bit too difficult. I know we are supposed to love one another as ourselves, but it ain't always easy. There is a dark blotch in my heart that occurred well over thirty years ago. It remains there today as a reminder of utmost betrayal. Forgiving is not as easy as it might sound, even though it's the right thing to do.
Thanks for bringing up those bad memories...only kidding.
Have a blessed day.

Posted 10 Months Ago


Susan 🦋

4 Months Ago

SORRY for late reply! I just am not on here much lately. Thank you for reading... sorry for the Dark.. read more
Beautiful and interesting poem. Enjoyed reading 👍

Posted 10 Months Ago


A beautiful expression of life's twists and turns, Celebrating innocence, love, and lessons learned, The poem captures the paradox of choices we face, Reminding us that love overcomes with its embrace.

Keep penning!

Posted 1 Year Ago


Susan 🦋

1 Year Ago

Thank you kindly for reading 😊
Did you write this?? I like the format. something about someone of royalty having written this . Thasks for sharing

Posted 1 Year Ago


Susan 🦋

1 Year Ago

Please pm me.
Matthew Daalling

1 Year Ago

Whats Pm me mean?
Susan 🦋

1 Year Ago

:-) message...
Hi Susan. With courage and wisdom granted, we find serenity. In the vastness of time we are but children, forever learning during our brief lives. Your thoughts are so eloquently penned in this beautiful poem. I love it!

I really like how you fracture the language. Your thoughts feel timeless as though written when this form may have been developed. I'm not familiar with it so I'll have to search it. For all I know it's a modern form. In any case, an excellent poem.

Bill

Posted 1 Year Ago


Susan 🦋

1 Year Ago

Hi Bill, Thank you! Courage and wisdom indeed! You should try this form out :-)
William Michael Reeves

1 Year Ago

In your notes you said the form has a set meter. Is that iambic?
Susan 🦋

1 Year Ago

yes... it always flows better.
Why did the word 'pendulum' come to mind after reading only four lines!?! Then look - the actual word is there in invisible golden letters, Susan. Is true, from first line to last there is a distinct cadence which would be hard to improve. Your skill is using true form yet always in a sensitive manner, your insight same. Plus, Susan, you add life's unsung lessons, one: "Choose to love only those we hope we can trust and are free to reciprocate!

Happy Everything for 2024, dear friend

Posted 1 Year Ago


Susan 🦋

1 Year Ago

Hi Emma, Thank you for this lovely review!! I do appreciate it :-)
emmajoygreen

1 Year Ago

You're very welcome. Happy Easter... :)
Brilliant is the only word to decribe your poem dearest Susan.
From the fantastic image to the very last line...brilliant.
Your are so amazing, as I struggle with my newest endeavour French Quatran...not easy for me...
Just finished my first Ballad AWAKEN and posted it..hope you might like yo read it and give an honest review... that would be great.
I so enjoy reading your words...
Lisa, getting late in Spain

Posted 1 Year Ago


Susan 🦋

1 Year Ago

Thank you kindly Lisa. 😊yes, I will try and get over to your page to read.
Lisasview

1 Year Ago

You are most welcome Susan.
Lisa
I loved the poetry dear Susan.
"Such worthiness in life, rejoice!
(Dare not, subdue a truthful voice).
Such worthiness,
such worthiness …
a vibrant paradox of choice."
I did like the logic of the above lines. I believe we decide our emotions. Good or bad? Thank you for sharing the amazing poetry and your thoughts.
Coyote

Posted 1 Year Ago


Susan 🦋

1 Year Ago

Aww thanks for the kind review! 😊 indeed, life is full of choices… either in action or response.. read more
Coyote Poetry

1 Year Ago

I enjoy your work dear Susan and you are welcome.
To be frank I am not a fan of most form and rhyme scheme which often leads to antiquated diction and skewed syntax,
You have handled this form admirably and I salute you skill.

Winston

Posted 1 Year Ago


Susan 🦋

1 Year Ago

Well, maybe? I could probably benefit from reading more.
W. Barrett Munn

1 Year Ago

I find reading poetry to be the greatest source of inspiration.
Susan 🦋

1 Year Ago

I find life to me mine 😊 but of course, reading others beautiful poetry is inspirational too. WC .. read more
I do so admire the patience to work with complex rhyme schemes.

Love overcomes each twisting turn

That is so true Susan. I enjoyed all three of your stanzas, moving from early years and innocence through to adulthood and the roller coaster that life can be. Your lines are lyrical and the refrain works so well. An accomplished piece of writing. A beautiful pen. Much enjoyed.

Posted 1 Year Ago


Susan 🦋

1 Year Ago

Thank you Chris, I do enjoy the challenge. Thank you for reading and for the lovely review 😊

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Added on February 12, 2023
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