Redemption Reigns

Redemption Reigns

A Poem by Susan 🦋
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Complex Alliterisen

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Redemption REIGNS


Desolate dirt and hopelessly hurt,

Luciferian lies fueling crippling cries.

Trenching truth of yesterday's youth,

disguised deceit and constricting conceit.

Plunder pride in steady stride,

secret sin and wickedness, where-in,

Man lives in a world devoid of God. 


The promised place and glorious grace,

with goodness gaining and redemption reigning.

Sovereign shield and hopelessness healed,

prophets paving and salvation saving.

Perfect peace and sorrow's cease,

Forever faithful and grown grateful,

knowing Abba's love will lead us home.

© 2023 Susan 🦋


Author's Note

Susan 🦋
The Complex Alliterisen
(unrhymed)
Complex Alliterisen is a seven line per verse poem. But, the pattern for the first six lines must be
such that, when the number of syllables in the first 6 lines are arranged, the odd
number lines have syllables in decreasing order, and the even number lines, have
syllables in decreasing order. And, there must be two alliterations per line.

There are numerous syllable-count formats. Let's use the popular version below.

1st line- 9 syllables
2nd line- 11 syllables
3rd line- 8 syllables
4th line- 10 syllables
5th line- 7 syllables
6th line- 9 syllables
7th line- 9 syllables (same as line 1)

The odd number lines are as follows:
1st line- 9 syllables
3rd line- 8 syllables
5th line- 7 syllables
7th line- 9 syllables (same as line 1)


The even number lines are as follows:
2nd line- 11 syllables
4th line- 10 syllables
6th line- 9 syllables

See how they progress in decreasing order.
That's all; but don't forget two 7-line verses make a Complex Alliterisen.
The last line (the seventh line) doesn't need any alliteration in it,
but has to be the same number of syllables as the first line.

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The form of your poem is exacting but a guiding star that should be studied, then patiently practiced
Your view of life and the rise and fall or humanity is compelling, yet, gently empathetic, Susan. Humankind is very much a mix and un-match: for and to me, you have put that subtly throughout. especially inferred here, ' ..with goodness gaining and redemption reigning.

Posted 1 Year Ago


Susan 🦋

1 Year Ago

Thank you Emma for the review 😊
emmajoygreen

1 Year Ago

You're very welcome. As someone who finds form very hard to follow through, I so admire what you so .. read more
This poem seems to be exploring themes of sin, redemption, and faith. The first stanza describes a world that is "desolate" and "hopelessly hurt," where lies and deceit fuel "crippling cries." The second stanza contrasts this with the "promised place" of "glorious grace" and "redemption reigning," where prophets pave the way for salvation and there is "perfect peace" and an end to sorrow. The final line, "knowing Abba's love will lead us home," suggests a belief in a higher power and a sense of comfort and security that comes from that belief. Overall, this poem seems to be grappling with some of life's big questions and the search for meaning and purpose in a world that can often seem dark and difficult. Thank you for sharing it to the world!

Posted 1 Year Ago


Susan 🦋

1 Year Ago

Thank you for this incredible and very accurate review!!😊
Hmm interesting. We definitely haqve talent here..

Posted 1 Year Ago


Susan 🦋

3 Months Ago

Thanks for reviewing!
Oh my goodness, another structure I know nothing about... I love structure and so I probably will try it some day. Trying to learn all the many forms on my plate as I am still quite new to all this.
Thank you for sharing not just your poem but the exact structure to (try) and follow.

Lisa, another beautiful day here in Spain

Posted 1 Year Ago


Susan 🦋

3 Months Ago

Thank you Lisa for the review! Sorry for late reply... I'm just not here much lately :/
Lisasview

3 Months Ago

No problem .. I too am seldom on here… and after a year of Fan Story I stopped that completely….. read more
You are a wealth of form and structure! Inspiration as well. Although the world is as yet not devoid of God, it's getting there. Alliteration happens to be one of my favorite aspects of poetry. I've used it as a form and structure but had never seen a formal poetic form requiring it. Something tells me if I keep reading you I might learn something. Thank you!!!

Posted 1 Year Ago


Susan 🦋

1 Year Ago

Thank you Bill for so many reviews! Not devoid yet and hopefully never! Another form you should try... read more
William Michael Reeves

1 Year Ago

I just happen to have an idea that is looking for a form to be written in. What is the origin of thi.. read more
Susan 🦋

1 Year Ago

Not sure on the origin ... I can find out. Richard sent it to me.
In awe of your patience at attempting such complex poetic forms. Well done Susan. Loved the alliteration presented in your stanzas.

Posted 1 Year Ago


Susan 🦋

1 Year Ago

Thank you Chris for the sweet review! Patience?? ;) Sometimes...
Wonderful Complex Alliterisen as well as the topic you chose to write it in. There really are just two kinds of people in this world, regardless of the reasons why. Nicely penned. tyfs

Posted 1 Year Ago


Susan 🦋

1 Year Ago

Thank you for reading!!!
I firmly believe that good overcomes even in the end. In this world, we may not always witness it; but I still believe. This is very well written and a very challenging form.

Posted 1 Year Ago


Linda Marie Van Tassell

1 Year Ago

LOL! Be forewarned. After the Crown of Sonnets comes the Heroic Crown of Sonnets. Buckle up! :)
Linda Marie Van Tassell

1 Year Ago

And the Heroic Crown of Crowns!
Susan 🦋

1 Year Ago

Omg! He IS trying to kill me 😂
A poem I wish I had written. Excellent job, Sue.

Posted 1 Year Ago


Susan 🦋

1 Year Ago

Aw thank you!! :-)

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