Worked hard to find a poem of yours I have not read… and, I came across this one.
What a delight!!
I adore the structure as I always do with all I have read of yours… and your image is amazing!!
Days and then years fly by..
I am writing with my left finger as I recently broke my clavicle and on top of that have 2nd degree burns on my back,
Not easy
Loved it!!!
Lisa
…. I have all of my poetry actually on another site ( fanstory) thank you for the review! Broken c.. read more…. I have all of my poetry actually on another site ( fanstory) thank you for the review! Broken clavicle?? And burns?? Omgoodness! You need some serious healing! 🙏
1 Year Ago
I just took a quick peek at the site. Do pay to post?
Such a graceful celebration of the seasons! While enjoying the vivid visuals you impart here, I'm also reminded of how time seems to fly by. Here it is mid-January already & before you know it, I will have survived another winter! But your poem doesn't discriminate against any season, and likewise, we can try not to scorn our least favorite parts of anything in life! (((HUGS))) Fondly, Margie
Posted 3 Years Ago
3 Years Ago
Thank you Margie for your kind words! Yes, the seasons just fly by...
I enjoyed this colorful piece of work, but I think what I enjoyed most was your response to CLR9. I learned a great deal about the structure of the Shakespearean Sonnet. It gave me cause to go back and reread your poem again and again.
I appreciate the fact that you took the time to explain all that you did.
Having read this work several times I came to realized its greatness.
These sonnets are not an easy write, and yet, you've conquered it.
Great job.
Posted 4 Years Ago
4 Years Ago
:-) thank you for taking the time to read and review!!! Thank you for the kind words! I'm smiling. I.. read more:-) thank you for taking the time to read and review!!! Thank you for the kind words! I'm smiling. I am please you enjoyed tis Sonnet. Yes, that "other review" lol That boy needed to be schooled. I understand people may not like more traditional poetic forms...but a opinion is not a review....I hope he understood my point. But, i do appreciate your review!! I'll try to get over to your page soon :-)
Hello CLR9,
This is not a constructive review. It is your opinion based on ignorance. If you .. read moreHello CLR9,
This is not a constructive review. It is your opinion based on ignorance. If you can maintain an open mind, I will explain this to you. This is a Shakespearean Sonnet, structurally sound in its format. Though as a general rule, the sonnet is defined as having 14 lines and an iambic pentameter meter, there's a significant difference between the two most common forms of the sonnet: the Shakespearean (aka English) and Petrarchan (aka Italian) sonnets
.ABABCDCDEFEFGG
These letters represent the sound that appears at the end of each line.
So, following this pattern of alternating rhymes, the last words of the first and third lines must rhyme; the second and fourth; the fifth and seventh; the sixth and eighth; and so on, ending in a final rhyming couplet.
Iambic Pentameter
“Pentameter” derives from the Greek word pente (meaning five), and thus has five poetic "feet." Each foot is a unit of two syllables; thus, there are ten syllables in a line of pentameter.
“Iambic” means that each foot is an “iamb.” Iambs are comprised of an unstressed, followed by a stressed syllable, resulting in a “ta-TUM” rhythm. The word “hel-LO” is an example of an iambic foot.
So a line of iambic pentameter is a line of five iambic feet, resulting in a 10-syllable rhythm of ta-TUM ta-TUM ta-TUM ta-TUM ta-TUM.
An example of a line of iambic pentameter is “Shall I / comPARE/ thee TO / a SUM / mer's DAY?” (from Shakespeare's “Sonnet 18”)
Although your poem should have a single focus, each stanza of the sonnet should develop the idea further. Each quatrain should build toward the final couplet, where you will have a turn, or a volta. The turn, which occurs in the 13th line of the Shakespearean sonnet, offers a resolution or insight into to the problem developed in the first three quatrains.
This of course, Is just a simple explanation. I enjoy the challenge of writing more traditional poetry. As a writer here yourself, I would assume you would appreciate a well-written review.
Perhaps you just don't care for the general theme...and that's ok. As a reviewer though, keep this simple rule in mind. "If you can't say anything nice, don't say anything at all" or " Just be nice." I have said my peace in regards to your "review." I will not engage in any further conversations with you ( UNLESS you offer a sincere apology) that at least gives me a hint into your character.
I love this descriptive writing.
Weather, Climate, Season and moments are what nature uses to grow the garden it has placed us into.
Every season brings a wonderful gift from nature, making us to have the scent of the world we live in.
Flowers blossom with Springing springs and the rivers in their coolness river along their beautiful path.
What a wonderful setting it is.
But all this are not just meant to be, they are there that we might learn to live together in love and peace and enjoy the beauty of nature.
Well written, Susan.
Posted 5 Years Ago
5 Years Ago
Thank you for taking the time to read and review! I do appreciate your words and thoughts! :-)
'Together, harvest bountiful reward ... two Soulmates thrive 'neath Heaven's great accord. '
Tis true, whatever the weather or circumstances, love can and does survive. You've created such calm and seasonal influences, made your sonnet a prayer of a sort.. fine writing and heartfelt, for sure. You've created bliss from virtually every emotion one could offer in fourteen lines. This has it all, Susan. as the picture offers and your words signify - there is everything in love and its many tangents.
Posted 5 Years Ago
5 Years Ago
Sweet Emma! Thank you for this lovely review! You always put a smile on my face.
5 Years Ago
A real pleasure, Susan. Re.reading , lovely words.