Where Hope Resides

Doubledown Style (Fours 'n Sixes)

'Neath open eyes,

deep darkness lies,

and chills my depths of soul.

Entrenched within,

heartache held in--

shall faith my heart console?

Completely lost,

will broken, tossed--

my heart begins to pray.

Arms raised up high,

asked questions why--

concede, and beg your stay.

 Darkness shattered,

Shadows tattered--

black fading, shades to grey.

Grief-soothing peace,

forlornness cease--

clouds waning on this day.

Revealing love

from up above,

true love that holds me tight

now rides with me

when I can't see

my way through darkest night.

Author's Note

Google image/Glimmer of hope.
Doubledown Style (Fours 'n Sixes)
A poetic form created by Richard W. Jenkins
Syllable count 4,4,6,4,4,6
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Reviews

[William Michael Reeves]

Like I was saying in the other review, you have many passions. You've doubledowned on your passionate faith in this one. I like how you resolve the ache in the end with a lift from above.

[Beccy]

This is a beacon of light and hope in an oft time lost and seemingly increasingly faithless world; and for me, 'tis a perfect pick me up for these troubled times.

Since lockdown, our congregation shares the sadness of the many who are not able to physically meet together. Earlier in the summer, we were able to attend church and enjoy service in the grounds. But now, with the weather turning and the new rules being put in place, we are being denied even that simple pleasure.

But as the title of your poem says, 'The hope resides,' and all of us prayerfully and confidently look forward to the day when we can all meet together again.

Beccy.

[emmajoy]

Your chosen picture of that lone, delicate lone flower opens the senses to what's coming, Susan.

' Darkness shattered, Shadows tattered-- black fading, shades to grey.-
Grief-soothing peace, - forlornness cease-- clouds waning on this day. '

You've passed from those dark words to light so bright, you know, as your reviewers know, that there is always that glorious love.. waiting, ready. Beautiful content, written superbly.

[Einstein Noodle]

i'm a fan Susan .. your intellect, heart and Faith shine in all the poems of yours i have read so far .. smooth and natural creative and original ... your chosen pic painted with your words ... the darkest hours can be terrifying .. paralyzing ... i will never understand how a human being can get through them denying any faith at all ... hope is truly there ... all we have to do is hold with the smallest amount of Faith and the abyss will surely fade to grey .. your inspiring poem is one to take with me today and every day .. thanks so much for sharing your "stuff" right here at the Cafe'
E.

[Susan 🦋]

What a smile- making review! Thank you! Faith, for sure has been tested so many times..I have failed so many times. lol At times I think my Savior just rolls is eyes and thinks "Are you kidding me"!... But my faith will stand...shaken at times, but will always stand. I am not perfect, but without my God, I am nothing.

[Einstein Noodle]

i hear you ... now as i think about it .. we only imagine the fall .. once in God's Hands nothing can pluck us from Him ... we do fall down .. but are still in those solid Hands of God

[Relic]

I admire your ability to write in form. I've attempted it only a few times and find it difficult. Your words are perfect here, to me.

Excellent writing, Susan.

[Susan 🦋]

Omgoodness! I am missing reviews right and left here! I do apoligize!!! Thank you for these lovely words, thank you for reading!!!!

[jacob erin-cilberto]

yes, a pertinent rhyme scheme to fit the idea and cause a perfect flow to this.
a romantic river that runs from entry to exit of these words.
j.

[Susan 🦋]

Lovely review! Thank you. :-)

[jacob erin-cilberto]

you are more than welcome as I am really enjoying your writing. If you have some spare moments would love a visit from you.
j.

[Susan 🦋]

sure... here for a bit.

[Richard🖌]

Beautifully rendered, Susan,
Never has this form been more powerfully and appealingly represented than you have in this magical embrace of your mind's, heart's, and emotion's deeply meaningful message of how hope, belief, faith, and willingness to reach out, invite in, harvest, and blend it all into your dreams with the one ingredient that will always make it work ⁓ love.

Never a more perfect meter, rhyme, flow, touching metaphor, and captivating poem have I had the pleasure to read and feel, and what a powerfully meaningful picture, too … KUDOS to You, Dear Master Poetess! ⁓ Richard

[Susan 🦋]

Dear Richard, I apologize this reply is coming so late. I don't know how I missed this. Thank you so much for taking the time to rea and review. You really understand my faith-filled message here :) Thank you kindly for the wonderful compliments! I clearly have a good teacher. Master Poetress? no way, but thank you for sying it. I hope you have a wonderful day.

[Richard🖌]

No one makes me feel more special or appreciated than you do, Susan … yours, ever-so faithfully! 🍃

A most wonderful day to You, as-well. : )

[Anjeline]

Beautiful poem written in a new way. I loved the lines-'Neath open eyes,
deep darkness lies. Well done fellow writer 👍

[Susan 🦋]

Thank you for stopping by and leaving such a kind review! Much appreciated:-)

[Anjeline]

You're welcome:)

[BlackPrince]

I like the fact that you express your ideas with different poetic forms.
You certainly are a true poetic soul.

[Susan 🦋]

Well thank you for your kind words! Bitter cold here in Wisconsin ~ heart warming review.

[kentuck14]

You are quite the formalist; well done. To my untrained ears it sounds like Hopkins or Herbert.


Tom

[Susan 🦋]

Hi Tom, thank you for stopping by and reviewing my work. Formalist?? Well, it a piece is following a certain format...then it best be spot on :-) I'll try and get over to your page and take a look as soon as I can...Thanks again :-)