Lush, Sultry Night

Pantoum

Cool breeze, soft touch, lush sultry night,  

rest memories 'neath moon-kissed lips. 

Hot, growing passions take to flight; 

desires embraced whilst warm dew ~ drips.  

 

Rest memories 'neath moon-kissed lips, 

sweet essence lingers -- restless sighs. 

Desires embraced, whilst warm dew ~ drips. 

eternal love bears no disguise.  

 

Sweet essence lingers -- restless sighs … 

gentle fingertips trace my spine. 

Eternal love bears no disguise; 

slight shivers quicken ~ so divine! 

 

Gentle fingertips trace my spine, 

shall not resist such boyish charms. 

Slight shivers quicken ~ so divine, 

wrapped tightly in my lover's arms.  

 

Then, joining bodies, hearts ’n souls … 

hot, growing passions take to flight. 

Held breath exhaled, pure bliss extols … 

cool breeze, soft touch, lush sultry night.

Reviews

[William Michael Reeves]

Nice form! My poetips traced your words and found them to be sublime. I felt smooth advancement in the curves of a Pantoum. Since we write what we know, I'm starting to think you've lived a passionate life.

[Susan 🦋]

Maybe, or we write our dreams😉 thank you for reading 🌺

[MarkAndTheOcean]

Very beautiful little poem, filled with eroticism but very elegant and tender, sort of reminds me of something by Leonard Cohen.
Keep it up!

[John Alexander McFadyen]

You write so eloquently and try different classical forms. Your word choice injects the scenes with the emotion and in this sultry is the watch word.

[Susan 🦋]

:-) thank you for the review! Yes, I love to try different forms, I suppose I like the challenge :-)

[Zayir]

This makes me feel like two teenage lovers having sex on a summer night and there love is coming into full fruition. Lovely, elegant and an amazing read!

[Susan 🦋]

Thank you for taking the time to read and review. I do appreciate it :-)

[Tina Louise UK]

Gorgeous read, enjoyed :) x

[Susan 🦋]

Thank you ! I'm glad you enjoyed this little piece and I appreciate the review! :-)

[wordman]

sweet poem of passion,loved the image and the imagery

[Susan 🦋]

Thank you so much! I appreciate the kind review! :-)

[wordman]

my pleasure

[Relic]

This is one of the most beautiful parts of being alive sometimes. Your writing is admirable.

[Susan 🦋]

Looks who's here!!! thanks for stopping by with this awesome review!

[emmajoy]

This reminds me of a piece of glorious music, bars and chords repeated as if in ripple time rather than specific structure. You've captured bliss as if ebbing and flowing in sweet succession.. A beautiful anthem written in words!!?

[Susan 🦋]

:-) awww Thanks Dear!

[emmajoy]

Should have added: incredibly warm as warm!!

[Susan 🦋]

you are too kind. :-)

[Phill Oz O'fee]

Love the respective use of stanzas within the structure of the writes - like waves of highlighted passion! A melding of spirits poetically embracing - wonderful! :-)

[Susan 🦋]

Hey you! Thanks for stopping by and leaving this wonderful review!!

[Kelly Scheppers]

The elegance and eloquence of this are at such a heightened level of euphoria. Beautiful form and execution, Susan!

[Susan 🦋]

:-) Thank you for the great review! I'm smiling!.