That was fun! --- Some birds sing, others sit on your shoulder and whisper secrets. Beware of the secret whisperers, they leave other things behind, well, sometimes they do. And always say "Thank You" to the Mockingbird when he sings, "Pretty, pretty, pretty!
A wonderful poem dear Susan. Those sneaky birds, tempting us sweet words of hope. I liked the complete poem. You made me smile this morning. Thank you for sharing the amazing poetry.
Coyote
' Begged, tell me more! - Will he adore - And hold me everyday? - Shall tell, that bird - Said not a word - But winked and flew away.. '
Such a delightful finishto your poem, ends with a pronounced spring in its step! Your meter danced my thoughts along, feel happy in the wake of your words, Susan. You've turned my okay into a broad smile. Thank you for sharing such finely metered and visual phrases. Happy me. :)
Posted 4 Years Ago
4 Years Ago
Aw Emma, Thank you so much for this lovely review! I DO appreciate you stopping by! :-)
ahahahaha ... love the turn in closing .. such a romantic uplifting theme ... and then "poof" she's gone .. reminds of of this https://youtu.be/naoknj1ebqI
i like the language ... its kind of classical but very today as well somehow .. nice one Susan!
E.
Posted 4 Years Ago
4 Years Ago
:-) So happy you enjoyed this fun liitle piece! THANK YOU!
Hi Margie, thank you for yet another wonderful review! This stlye " Quickie or Double down#2" is an original form created by Richard W Jenkins...Master poet, here on this site. Unlimited verses, any topic..4/4/6/4/4/6 aabccb.etc... Check him out..:-)
I like the way this message sounds fragmented in short choppy lines, as this would be the sound of a bird imparting its wisdom. Good use of rhyme & imagery to convey your many sensations of good will & hopefulness. In today's gloomy world, a bright uplifting poem like this is a treasure (((HUGS))) Fondly, Margie