First Flight

When the tight knots turn to loose strings,

The bird learns to flap his wings

Taking to the sky for the first time.

Swooping and gliding

The air bending to his will.

Forgetting the questions

That are sill unanswerable.

 

The flapping of the bird’s wings

Carry it away from the memory of its sins.

And the steady rhythm

Chases away the conflict within.

It forgets the anger and heartbreak

That on the ground,

It must face.

 

Now it has the power to fly away

Should it come back?

Should it leave or stay?

 

But for now,

It just fly’s.

It forgets the lies.

It will have to land one day

But the world is full of new possibility 

Reviews

[Mirabella]

Wow. I really like this poem. How this bird just breaks away from its circumstances and gets to fly freely. It's beautiful. :)

xx

[Pencrafter]

This poem is heavy! (that's an older-generation expression). The bird metaphor is interesting, showing how there are some things in life we cannot gain by reading a book or watching a video; they must be experienced first hand. In the last verse, second line, you might change 'fly's' to 'flies'. Interesting poem.

[msJ]

well versed and love the meaning

[afra]

one word ...BEAUTIFUL

[Owlgirl]

Great writing! Amazing work! Awesome use of vocabulary!

[~Sara~]

Brooklynn, this is a great poem. Nice job on chosing your words wisely. You mentioned in your profile on the side that you are bad at spelling, and I think you're definately improving. Thanks for sharing!
-Sara

[shawlyn]

Hi Brooklyn,
Another great poem, full of imagery and symbolism. Well done and keep on writing.
Regards
Shawlyn

[J. J. Nightingale]

This is good .. favorite line ..When the tight knots turn to loose strings,

The bird learns to flap his wings .. Wow .. words beyond your years ..

Well done .. life is full of decisions .. and landings .. Jazz

[Lydia]

Nice work!

[Wild Willow Blue]

I love the message of being able to "fly away" from all your fears and foes, while still realizing that you have to face them some day. That only makes us stronger. Nice work.