Icarus

Freedom.

Freedom at last!

Flying away from your chains

And he had thought that you were trapped!

 

Could not escape by land or sea

Escape by air it must be.

Now flying higher than the birds,

Forgetting your father’s words.

"The sun above will melt the wax

And the sea will wet the feathers."

Feeling invincible, your mortality ignored.

Your wings aren’t natural like the birds.

 

Hubris is your fatal flaw.

And as you challenge the heavens

You begin to fall.

 

The sun’s warmth had heated the wings.

The wax let go of the feathers it holds.

And now with your man-made wings you fall

To the ocean below.

Plunging too fast,

You cannot be saved.

Your body will be lost in the waves.

Author's Note

Help?

Reviews

[Wild Willow Blue]

Your wording in this goes along with the legend it is based upon, so well. Nice work!

[Odayin]

Wow, I've never seen a poem based on an ancient legend. I was so confused on why it had such a unique title.
Due to this fact, I knew the outcome of the storyline, but that didn't take away from the great poetry. You had great imagey, predictions, descriptions, and accurate display of the legend.
Great poem, nice job

[Alicia Beavis]

The ending I felt could be changed just very slightly to read:

"Plunging too fast,
you cannot be saved.
Your body is lost
forever in the waves"

But that is just a suggestion that you don't have to agree or take my advice on.

Lovely use of imagery and I just generally enjoyed reading this!

[Sylvana]

What would you need help with? the only mistake I noticed was "could not escape by land or see" in which I think you have meant sea, but other than that this poem was very good!