Fly Away

Don’t your wings get heavy?

Doesn’t your heart get sore?

You swear you’ll fly away

Far away from here

Can you fly with that weight,

The weight of all you know,

On your shoulders?

 

Don’t those tears

Dampen your feathers?

How can you fly away

After all the pain it took to get here?

Can’t you remember?

 

You swear you’ll fly away

But how much better will it be there?

Will it make you forget

All you’ve seen?

Will it make you forget

All those screams?

 

But you swear you’ll fly away

Be gone one day

disappear

Pretend all these memories

Where just bad dreams

The worst sort of nightmare

 

A bird is never happy caged

It longs to fly away

But they’ve broken my wings

Reviews

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Doesn’t your heart get sore?
Yes, it does :(
A great poem, I felt all ur words in my soul, I shall never forget this poem! 100/100 :)

[Amanda]

Inlike it, nice job :)

[Sarah G.]

This is a really good poem. It made me feel what you want to convey. Flying away, walking away from the horrible things that happened in the past.
It is quite intense and a very beautiful poem. Keep up the good work. :)

[Sarah G.]

Could you please read and leave a comment and rating on my poem, 'The Lonesome Dark'? Thanks. :)

[Pencrafter]

Your well-written poem evokes feelings of flight, up into the clouds or away from something bad. And I like the question posed, "But how much better will it be there?" Sometimes a change is good as distance and time heals all scars.

[Aehr]

this was heartfelt! I am in love with it, especially the last stanza
Good job!

[Odayin]

It makes me wonder what inspired you to write this. Merely just seeing a bird caged up, or rather a battle within yourself that you've related to a bird.
Probably neither because the human mind is so complex over everything, eh, still nice to dream though right?
I like the staircase effect you had (is that what it's actually called? It should be!) with the smooth almost introductory stanza to the powerful final line. Quite truly wonderful if you were to ask a passerby.
Nice topic and idea and a great job staying on topic, it's been a while since you've written a poem, so it was expected to be glorious.
Call me crazy, but I think it lived up to expectations

[Krista Weiss]

Wow!!! I love this poem!! It's really amazing :)

[Sophie]

I love this so much! My only critique is the second to last line should be changed to It longs to fly away because then the last line has more of an impact :P
AMAZINGNESS as usual

[Brooklyn]

thanks :)

[Sophie]

no problemo chica