marks on a tree

I was taking a walk,

under a bunch of trees,

I sat down to take a rest,

when I realized a bee,

that bee landed onto a small branch,

on that branch there was a mark,

it had a heart,

labeled into the bark,

it was cute really,

to see two letters of initials,

wondering how if they were in love,

and how if they were love struck by two missiles,
I left after that,

and came back after several years,

I saw a fairly age women and man,

hugging him with her hand on the tree with happy tears,

from a distance away,

I heard him say something that caught my ear,

he said their marking had been there,

for over 20 years.

 

Reviews

[Justin]

that was really cutie :) :) i like how you added the couple to it, it made it alot better :)

[yuki]

Haha thank you

[Justin]

your welcome that part made it must better :)

[Ryan Henderson]

VERY good, meaningful and nostalgic, also implements the feeling of loathing and future hope, keep it up, Yuki!

[yuki]

Thank you will do :)

[Asante]

Someone beat me to what I wanted to say, but this piece really does give off a fairy-tale kind of spark. Simple, yet unique in the way that it was told. Sweet job with this piece. :)

[yuki]

Thank you for the review

[Asante]

Anytime. :)

[jemaral]

This poem makes me a little melancholic and gives off a fairy tale love story kind of vibe.. a very nice piece about love and promises which was presented by the poet in a way that i personally don't see to often in poems of love, In a third person perspective excellent choice in approach. Great Job and thank you this piece inspires me to try to make one of a similar style.

[yuki]

Thank you i love this peice as well