love is like wine

love is like wine,

one sip and its running through your vains at a single time,

the blood rush run,

its something thats easily done,

but when you drink a bunch you get love drunk,

some same being love drunk is worse then rump,

love drunk is one of a kind as some may know,

that when that person come to your rescue and so and so,

but having that wine and great heart pound,

it makes you so speakless you can make a sound.

Author's Note

an inspiration by my mom made m write this. hope you like it :) and please do review :D

Reviews

[Bluefire]

"but when you drink a bunch you get love drunk,
some same being love drunk is worse then rump,"
Suggestion-> "but when you drink too much you get love drunk,
some same being love drunk is worse than rump,"
~*~
"that when that person come to your rescue and so and so,"
Suggestion-> "that when that person comes to your rescue and so and so,"
~*~
"it makes you so speakless you can make a sound."
Suggestion-> "it makes you so speechless you can't make a sound."
~*~
Anywho, I like the comparison between love and wine, they ARE very similar.
Well played. ^^

[yuki]

thank you bluefire :) and Ill edit it thank you :)

[Bluefire]

You're welcome. ^^

[Kenneth Nicholas Lowe]

I could relate to this poem in a much different way than you intended...throughly enjoyed the way you wrote this poem, that it give readers more than one view...

[yuki]

thank you kindly :)

[Wandering Minstrel]

I can most certainly feel the raw emotion here..very nice write

[yuki]

thank you :)

[Coyote Poetry]

I believe wine is more kinder than love. Love tattoos your heart. Wine give you a bad headache. I like the poem. Love and wine can fall into the same place. Thank you for sharing the excellent poetry.
Coyote

[yuki]

thank you for the review :)

[Coyote Poetry]

You are welcome.

[Jessica Lynn Polley]

I really like this poem it has an easy flow and a beautiful meaning. You are very insightful for how young you are. Great write!

[yuki]

thank you :) and yea people think im too young to write this but its a passion of mine :)

[Jessica Lynn Polley]

Oh no please I would never say you are to young to feel the way you do so please do not think that is what I meant. I just meant that for your age you are very talented...I have been chalked full of emotion since I can remember...age does not hinder emotion or talent I meant that as a complement.
ps. Happy early birthday...mine is September 22

[yuki]

I know what you meant its ok haha :) thank you your very talented too :) and thank you though its not for another 2 or 3 week :) happy early birthday to you too :)

[Cory Barrett]

Love is like wine. And just because it is expensive doesn't make it good, or delicious. Pretty labels do s**t for the taste

[yuki]

exactly :) thanks for the review

[Malister Mikey]

I liked this poem it has that gentle feel that can warm hearts. it's flow was absolutely perfect Great work.

[yuki]

thank you :)

[Rachel P]

This is a cute poem, I love the movement and flow of the piece, and the relation between wine and love.

[yuki]

i think it was the best piece ive done in relation to things :) thank you for the review

[Rachel P]

you're very welcome! glad to do it! Would you mind reviewing what I have even though it is so little? I would really appreciate it. :)

[yuki]

of course im reading a piece right now :)

[Rachel P]

Wonderful thank you so much!

[yuki]

thank you and my pleasure :)

[little thoughts]

nice writing girl. good one yuki !

[yuki]

thank you so much lioness :)

[anne]

its nice...good work dear... :))

[yuki]

thank you anne :)