Love is merely madness

a poem for her

Oh I don`t know, what she`s up to

Oh I don`t know what is going through her head

Oh I don`t know why she holding my hand

Oh I don`t know why she`s mad

She`s got her eyes on me every night

She tells me lies, but they seem so tiring

She speaks to me, her words are so wired

She acts so cold, but her desire got me on fire

She is the one for a drive,

black hair, lips, thighs in the hot night air

Love is merely madness they say

on my knees screaming yes yes they`re right

so unfair

I can`t deny, I love our fights

I can`t hide, I see her and smile

I`d like to die, with her hands on my neck

but I`m staying quiet, got a knife in my back

Baby we`re so right

I`d never make you cry

and if I do, I`d come to you

and I`d cry too

You are so cruel

Author's Note

hey guys I am still alive

Reviews

[JayG]

I deleted that odd first paragraph. That was NOT part of what I posted. Somehow, the site dumped in an unrelated first paragraph from something I sent to a spammer over a year ago.

Most odd, and certainly not meant for you.

• Oh I don`t know, what she`s up to

“She? The dog? The ghost? The politician? You know. The unknown “she” knows. But the reader, the one it’s written for, has not a clue. Does that make sense?

Think about it. Someone unknown, of unknown gender, age, and situation, is talking to an undefined “she,” about unstated events. That’s exactly as meaningful to a readeras a snippet of conversation heard from the people behind you in a restaurant.

Poetry isn’t us talking to the reader about what matters to us. That, no matter how poetically written is both a report and, irrelevant to those who don’t know us and our situation.

People come to poetry to be entertained by writing that will provide them with an emotional experience, not information on what matters to someone they don’t either know or care about. As E. L. Doctorow puts it: “Good writing is supposed to evoke sensation in the reader. Not the fact that it’s raining, but the feeling of being rained upon.”

By choice and placement of your words you have the power to make someone you will never meet laugh, cry, and feel the warmth of new love—if, you make use of the skills and knowledge that centuries of refinement of the poetic arts can provide.

The writing style we were given in school is fact-based and author-centric, as is your posted work. It’s great if your goal is writing a report, a letter, or an essay. But poetry requires a set of emotion-based skills, as does fiction.

They’re not hard to master, but they’re also not optional. So…

Mary Oliver is one hell of a poet. But she’s also produced a brilliant book, titled, A Poetry Handbook, one that should be required reading for anyone interested in writing poetry. You can download a copy here:
https://yes-pdf.com/book/1596

Try a chapter of two. I think you’ll be amazed at how obvious, and necessary the things she points out are.

So…I know this was pretty far from what you hoped to see, but still, since we’ll not address the problems we don’t see as being problems, I thought you might want to know.

Hang in there, and keep on writing.

Jay Greenstein
https://jaygreenstein.wordpress.com/category/the-craft-of-writing/the-grumpy-old-writing-coach/

[brokenwriter]

I don`t think people have to understand poetry. Poetry is for interpreting and projecting it onto your life and your situations. You don`t have to know who `she`is in my life, you have to think about who `she`is in your life. Everybody reads poetry differently- and poetry is not there for people to make sense.

[Alishba_Anhar]

great poem . relatable and inspiring.