Questional Suicide.

i really did this.... :/

i sit here thinkin about death,
taking my own life would not seem so bad,
for everything around me has slipped away,
ive lost all the happiness that once filled me,
i am like stone all the feeling is lost,
ive pushed people away,
i would welcome a knife to the chest without hesitation,
what does it matter i dont feel my heart beat,
i feel dead, a walking corpse,
im losing my self, and knowing of what i want,
i sit here in the bath tub putting my head under the water,
leaving everything to sound like vibration,
except...for my silent screams that i can never get rid of,
no one ever hears the screams that escape from my lips,
no one sees the pain that fills my eyes,
i feel the need for oxygen, yet i do not move,
why should i? when i already am corpse walking the earth,
what would be the need to live? when life has hit the highest limit of depression?

Author's Note

ignore the grammar. i really did this by the way...

Reviews

[A.Low]

damn well that was good

i used to feel like that alot and once my parents found out i felt ashamed as like i was hiding myself from them!

My mom cried for the next three days as my dad yelled at me!that was a long time ago but love ya

miss you and i love this one

[LlamaLord]

Every line in this reeks depression. Tragic but very well written. We all turn to death as an easy way out. Some of us never seem to be going through just the right amount of pain for it though. That is why the last line meant so much to me. Before you take any of this into consideration, think about the options :) from the authors note you wrote, it seems as though you wrote this for yourself. Keep goin and keep writin; it helps

-Austin

[BeautifulDisaster]

i like it a lot.
i can really feel the depression in it.

[Jade]

What I liked in this piece was that with every line I felt you going deeper. To me, the greatest writing comes from that truly deep voice. It is very painful getting there, but it will ultimately set you free.

This I promise you.

You have much to give, so keep going.

Best,
Jade