Darkness of me.

lying here in the dark isnt so bad.
cuz i live in a world where i am so sad.
nuthing is right i do everything wrong.
have the feeling that i will never belong.
no one understands the pain i go through.
if you were me i bet u would understand too.
lost the person that i used to be.
the person who was so happy nd free.
but i am trapped like a person locked in a cell.
my secrets are hidden there is no one i can tell.
pain in my body like ive breakin a bone.
no...thats just the feeling,the feeling of being alone.
i hold on to myself so tight for dear life.
so i wont get up lookin for a sharp edged knife.
no , i promised i wouldnt end things this way.
so i go to sleep until it is day.
when the days come up i wish to be in the black night.
wish to be alone nd stay out of sight.
the dark is where my world is at nd where i shall be.
cuz now that is the only place i feel careless nd free.

Author's Note

ignore grammar again lol.

Reviews

[Arthur Crow]

The talent here is the smooth flow of your lines and rhyme, your word choices are well placed and to good effect. Damn good poem! You make the dark morbidly seductive, very cool :)

[LlamaLord]

Hm...this piece really shows some raw emotion. Sometimes, things like this can be difficult to get over. If it is depression, suicide, really anything that makes you feel this way. You really just showed me that your tired of it. Tired of waking ever morning to get the same result. Anyway, to the point...very strong, but that's what I love about it.

[Sincere]

the safe place in darkness where the world cant reach or hurt you

great write

[Stephanie]

I really liked this. The rhymes flow nicely and it presents a clear message. I think a lot of people probably feel that way at times. Very nicely written :)