Great Wave

Written about the Tsunami a few years back.

A wall of water,

            rushing,

                crashing,

                          killing.

 

A great devastation,

            sadness,

                  death,

                       loss.

 

A blip in time,

        six microseconds gone,

                  a shake in the axis,

                               fear.

Reviews

[Alessander]

I love the format of this. It seems like waves undulating toward the shore. I esp like the last stanza

A blip in time,

six microseconds gone,

a shake in the axis,

fear.

It really puts humans in their place. A slight shift of the axis, and we are no more.

There will be no one left to even feel fear. Something to think about, esp since we here in the WestCoast recently received Tsunami warnings...

[Deviant Works]

This is all I can think about today and I don't know if I should have read this. I have cried all night and day with only loss on my mind. My close friend Karen was in Sendai when the earthquake had hit Japan, also when the tsunami ripped through the entire area. At this moment I don't even know if she is alive. "A great devastation, sadness, death, loss". How true, how gut-wrenching... "A blip in time", and then suddenly everything that was right is now wrong. A wonderful tribute to what was lost years ago, and a great thought for what has happened in Tokyo and across the coast of Japan. Thank you, Colleen.

[Mark D. Chevalier]

I like the way you slid the words across the page, denoting the oncoming peril of a wall of water. Certain this poem was rife with tension.
Nicely done!
Mark

[BrightEyes]

to me this is perhaps the most fearful natural occurrence - happens in an instant - no warning; and it's destruction knows no bounds. You've captured how quickly and horribly the rampage occurs here - and I loved the formatting to reflect waves - nicely done.

[Angel's Lady]

Wow. Looks like a wave, feels like a wave! Great write!

[The Rock And Roll Cowbo..]

Very impactful piece just like that devastation of the Tsunami. I like the raw power of this piece.