mended love

this is a poem I wrote about my earlier years of life

waiting lonely and patiently, striving for someone to love me
thousands of people walk past me, but they act as if im not even there
year after yearall alone and depressed, cold and in the darkness, afraid to go to bed
not knowing what was going to happen the next day, scared me to death
my heart was crushed, broken, and tormented, I felt like my life would never be completed
I had started to think that the world despised me
that I had done something wrong, hope was almost gone and I was clueless
my heart was aching, aching for a family to call my own I was drowning in my own tears, and didn't have anybody to pull me back up for air
it was as if I was a lost puppy, but no one came looking for me
i was trying to find my way back home, but that's kinda hard when yu don't know where home is

Author's Note

please ignore gammer problems
i am a new writer and would just like to hear some tips

Reviews

[~Princess~]

The good thing now sis is that you actually have a family of your own. And, I am so happy for you I just want to cry. I love you and miss you with all of my heart.

[Sami Khalil]

my heart was crushed, broken, and tormented...
Nice write.

[♪The Girl Next Do..]

Excellent write

[~Princess~]

Great job sis

[Thomas Fitzgerald]

It is even and leaves no space to go wrong, however the best advice is to use puncuation as if it were law, it makes it easier to read, well done.

[symmetryAsymmetry]

the most useful tip I've ever got:
write with your heart, not with your pen.

to me poetry is about emotions, imagination, creativity, originality, inspiration....in that order.
tap your emotions, and let words flow in tandum with them.
imagine something and try to describe it.
poetry is about beauty...even the dark side of beauty.
it doesn't have to be neat...like the thoughts in our head are a mess!
write down every thought and every image that comes to you...and you will have poetry!

[Backlight Burner]

Home is where the heart is
You should always find comfort within yourself, great poem :)

[death beyond reality]

if you have any ideas on what i could do to make my writing better, please let me know:)

[Joe Hunnell]

Very good poetry , especially since you are starting out , when i first started , i was nowhere near that good.

[misscb]

Great poem... Well done!!!