Old and New

about a guy

Trying to forget flashbacks of us
From the moment we laughed to the moment we touched
Days pass by and you’re still on my mind
I will probably think of you till the end of time

I never wanted our friendship to end
But you have changed so much that we won’t ever mend
One drastic change and one broken heart
Has caused every little thing we had to fall apart

What happened to the amazing guy you used to be
The one that made me smile and forget to breath
He seemed to have gotten replaced by someone who doesn’t care
And every time I call for him, he’s never there

One mistake I’ve made was falling in too deep
Getting out of this takes one big leap
Moving on is the hardest thing for me to do
Because I feel empty and lost without you

Reviews

[Invisible]

sounds painful, such is life.

[Glee]

This poem captivates, its very vivid and very real. It also rhymes and flows nicely.

[shoaib]

beautiful piece :)

[Jarrai]

Wow, poignant and very effective! I can honestly relate and the poem as a whole is understood. Good job.

[Ally Baker]

wow, i really liked this poem. there was so much emotion in it and the fact that i can relate so much to it, makes it all that more great. Great write :)

--Ally Baker
"Don't upset the writer. She might end up putting you in one of her books and killing you"

[Eidolon Michael]

I can relate to this poem very much...a very nice and heartfelt write

[Orlando Murcia]

Very heartfelt and moving

Great work on expressing yourself in this piece


Nicely done

[Kon™]

Really touching piece that shows how hard its been for you, the struggle that you showed just through this poem. Try to keep a strong hold and keep going ;) And great poem too, loved it, and the rhyming :D

[A]

Wow, that was, really great. @@ Really great indeed. @@

This is probably one of the best things I have ever read. -adds to library-

[AJChallenger]

The flow on this is a bit off. I also would suggest using commas and such to help control that.

It's a good first write, just give it a little work.