Does he know

Does he know how I feel
Does he know that I am real
Does he know I notice his soft eyes
Does he know I don't tell lies

Does he know I exist
Does he know I want his kiss
Does he know I want to taste his soft lips
Does he know I can't resist

Does he know I cry
Does he know why
Does he know he's the one for me
Does he know he's got the key

Does he know I'm right here
Does he know that it's clear
Does he know I'm the one
Does he know he's my rising sun

Reviews

[Cbklyn4u]

Like the way the poem starts out with the same words.. and ends with your feelings. The asking mind wanting to know. Like it very much!

[Michael Carr]

not bad. it's very touching and you give an emotional connection to the work that the reader can really focus on. it's well written and the repetition serves well for the piece.
it's a nice piece brit, both sympathetic and sorta heartbreaking.
good work.

[Endless Rain]

"Does he know I exist
Does he know I want his kiss
Does he know I want to taste his soft lips
Does he know I can't resist

Does he know I cry
Does he know why
Does he know he's the one for me
Does he know he's got the key"

Wow Brittany! this poem is very passionate and I can tell it came straight from your heart. Well written and very deep with emotion! Fantastic!

[Bryan A.]

Wow, babe. This is amazing. You're an awesome writer, and this was definitely touching. I think I'm... going to read more. Yeah, =). Awesome work hon.

[Nicole]

oh my gosh. i adore it. i love it. it sort of has the same style as my poem "what words"
i can realte completely, and it's so touching. it's short and sweet, and it asks all of the questions that have answers that are so hard to find!

[Abdirizak Mohamed]

wow i must say this was a nice and outstanding title poem. in this main key to the poem is "does" and you had put ever lines into it. this is poem is outstanding nice work.

[LlamaLord]

Very nicely put. I loved the repetition you kept throughout the poem, then, having the title repeating as well. I also, like this because it shows outer affection, inner affection, beauty and bits of sadness. Lovely read :)

[ATG]

This was a really good poem. I liked it. It was sweet and at the same time a little sad. I believe that he will only if you tell him. That is, if you have not already told him.

[Kiara]

perfect!
i loved this
and i think mostly
because i can relate so much!
:) -arabella

[AMetaphoricalSoul]

it's well done. I just have one suggestion. I know you're going for a recurring theme here but try not to begin every single line with the same phrase. it's way too repetitive. good job though