without her.

I missed my girlfriend tons while in Cali, so I wrote her this.

i hold her in my memories,

i kiss her in my dreams.

it seems the clock ticks endless,

but time's shorter than it seems.

the sun shines bright and cheerful,

but i'd much prefer the rain;

embrace her in the downpour,

let her rinse away my pain.

i long to feel her breathing

down my neck and up my spine,

and hear that simple "i love you"

that tells me she is mine.

i'm lost without her company;

an empty, hollow shell.

in her arms i'm in heaven

and without her i'm in hell.

Author's Note

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Reviews

[Jess_l_y]

This is great. You express the emotions so powerfully, it feels like I felt while reading it how you felt when writing it. If that makes any sense :P The rhythm and rhyme really help to express the sentiment, which is something I have noticed in all of your writing. I love it!

[Faraway Sado]

AWWWWWW...
You really have a wonderful way with words and you put feeling into words very beautifully.

[Nick Reynolds]

I really like this poem. I know the feeling and I have a song called Gone that I wrote when I felt the same way. :) This is great. Thanks for adding it! :)