so called friends....

so called friends....

A Poem by Brittany Roberts

i'm always their for my friends when they need me

but where are they when i need them?

it seems to me that they always are away

or have to go when i need help

 

is anyone gonna be their for me?

am i gonna suffer while they have a good life

always asking myself these questions

but i never get a straight answer

© 2011 Brittany Roberts


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good one


Posted 13 Years Ago


true friends are always there 2 help. if they always seem to elude u then they are hardly friends. friendship is always important to maintain.

Posted 13 Years Ago


I find you are a little bit incomplete with this entire thought process, try expanding your thoughts a lot more. Dig deeper into this problem you have and show me what is unique about it. Try to find what difference you have to offer to your readers. Also, remember, in poetry, less is more. If you have a line with 8 words and you can actually say it in 6, then do it. You have a lot of generalized questions and thoughts, try focusing on one and expand upon that. Good Job. I like it.

Posted 13 Years Ago



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