to the land of unbroken eyes

my breathing, only temporary.
the fortune told me i was almost there.
but when will i know.


you had me acting like someone i knew wasn't me,
but that's gone, there's a happiness i've come across.

and if this is only temporary, i'll take it as it comes.
repeating over and over in my head.

"this is what i deserve"
"i deserve this"

i deserve this
i deserve this.
repetition is the key.

you can only take me as i am.
for this i will not change.
you will not alter me in any way.

take me away, we'll fly across the sea,
to a land where no one will know you, not even me.

Reviews

[bob, small b. aka invs]

i like this very much. the use of repetition is very effective in the middle of the poem and the twist at the end of the last line leaves the reader something to chew on. nicely done.