Hush

The lullaby for a misunderstood child.

Hush little baby, don't say a word,

So sorry Momma can't buy you a mockingbird. 

 

Hush little baby, don't you cry,

Momma wishes she could give you the sky.

 

Hush little baby, please don't weep,

Turns out giving you the world isn't so cheap.

 

Hush little baby, I know it's not funny,

That the kids at school can tell we don't have money.

 

Hush little baby, I like your clothes,

They're patched together but no one knows. 

 

Hush little baby, I taped the holes in your shoes,

Where in the world did you get that bruise?

 

Hush little baby, I'll mend your jeans,

They obviously don't know what ugly means.

 

Hush little baby, while I hold you tight,

As you cry yourself to sleep in my arms at night.

 

Hush little baby, they don't know what they've done,

And as for sympathy, they have none. 

 

Hush little baby, I gave all that I could give,

To find a better place for you and I to live.

 

Hush little baby, you have to go to school,

Even if you will never be cool.

 

Hush little baby, Momma's always here,

Don't listen to the whispers that you overhear. 

 

Hush little baby, don't be scared,

You're the piece of heaven God and I share. 

 

 

Author's Note

A poem from a mother's point of view told to her child. I hope you like it! Any and all feedback would be appreciated, and if you know of a contest this could/should be entered in, please let me know! Also, please do send me read requests! It is hard for me to return the favor to everyone without them! I will make sure to read them and leave reviews!

Reviews

[SuspectGray]

Personally I would tighten this up a little to help the flow. The rhyming is good (I do like to rhyme as I enjoy the structure). For the lines after the ones starting with "Hush little baby" try counting the syllables making those lines all the same length.

Other than that...I think we can all relate to bullying for what ever reasons kids choose to bully.

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The other side of the lullaby that we never really think about... and what a nice touch, to constantly reassure the child that all is okay because mother and God are there... this is creative and profound.

[Brinleigh Bailey]

Thank you so much! I always thought the original "Hush Little Baby" was a little presumptuous to be honest. Not everyone has the money to buy their children happiness, but they will always be there for them. Again, thank you so much.

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I agree, Brnleigh... we are not all rich...

[Solitaireman]

I love how you took an old classic and made it your own. Very insightful. You seem to have a very deep understanding of your characters and the trials they face. I hope to read more of your works. Thank you for the recommendation.

[Brinleigh Bailey]

Thank you so much! I really tried to change the original "Hush little baby" from being able to give their child the world, to struggling financially. Again, thank you.

[Solitaireman]

I look forward to seeing more of your works.

[RedRose99]

This is great, I love it!

[Perkele.7885]

This poem here calls out to those with the sensitive ear. Once you start reading it, one is compelled to finish.

[Brinleigh Bailey]

Thank you :)