Reincarnation

"You only get one shot, do not miss your chance to blow." Excuse the profanity and vulgar language, I tend to write like this often. Here's a sample of my more aggressive lyrics.

Reincarnation

Okay so listen,

really just listen

cuz this s**t’s gonna be dissin

you ain’t gonna wanna be missin

put down your girl quit the kissin

put down your penis quit the pissin

put down everything you don’t wanna ruin this chance

because right now is yours

you can either claim it as your own and own it or you can disown it

whichever you decide just know that you can’t clone it

there’s no remake or retake

there’s no sequel to your mistake

there’s no bright rainbow with a gold-filled chest

there’s just a lifelong journey down a road full of shitfest

pull a Pond and s**t on the chest

yeah man hearin about that was the best

but forget the rest

keep your eyes on the answer to this test

but that question’s a trick I was jus trynna be slick

there’s no right answer to this test because you can do your best,

you can thrive but sooner or later there’s bound to be some kind of cardiac arrest

you are bound to die, silly hipster,

no one makes it out alive

so let’s take a second and talk about redemption

you can’t redeem yourself from a situation

that you put yourself in in the first place and

you can’t start over with relationships

you can’t start over with friendships

you can’t start over with relatives

all you can do is take some sedatives

sit back, relax, and let it all sink in

this world isn’t yours for the takin’, you’ll never win

you’re only as angelic as your most regretful sin

lintel

Reviews

[Elwyn]

Well damn. You really set the tone for this piece in the first lines. "put down your girl quit the kissin/
put down your penis quit the pissin". With this kind of language (which we often don't see in poetry) you really make the reader uncomfortable and grab their attention, which of course, was your intention. The message here is powerful and strong: Everything requires hard-work. Living requires hard-work. You're right, as the saying goes, chains are only as strong as their weakest link. I cannot not nitpick any mistakes or typos here. If you plan on putting this to a beat, I would recommend adding more punctuation where you want the reader to pause and add more flow, unless of course, your pauses and rhythm are all right here as is. (Nothing wrong with it, if so, just a reminder).

[bringthestoke]

thank you! I will definitely add more and see how it flows :)