Dance

You trampled my heart; lay waste my soul

Leaving me broken; shattered on the ground

I fight the melancholy; hold disdain for the tears

These are the tools for the weak

 

A tentative foothold; precariously perched

Ascending higher; gazing ever skyward

My heartbeat steady; my soul stalwart

These are the weapons of the strong

 

The Man in the Moon smiles

As I find the summit once more

Spreading my wings

I dance

 

Reviews

[SPINNING ON that dizzy ..]

Coming to terms and deciding to move ahead and say - it is what it is.... here I go forward. To decide you are stronger in what you have overcome - can't be all bad.... Nice bit of advice and I like the visual of spreading your wings and dancing with the man in the moon..... I say good night to him every night!

Kath

[Norma J. Jessee]

So beautifully penned Laura. Another one for my fav's.

[Spoken]

a beautiful climb! excellent words.. the right word choices really set the tone of a piece.

The Man in the Moon smiles

As I find the summit once more

Spreading my wings

I dance


beautiful imagery. It's a powerful thing when we are so enveloped with feeling our body shakes wildly in a dance of release from the overflow of deep emotion...

[Dani California]

"The Man in the Moon smiles
As I find the summit once more
Spreading my wings
I dance"

I love these lines as they breathe strength and
endurance into disappointment and heartbreak.
I've always loved the use of the word dance as
representing perseverance...

A sad piece, yet very strong. Very well written Laura,
I always admire your work.

[Adrian K. Smith]

I wish that I were able to find the resolve to fight the melancholy in such a stalwart manner. I wish that I were able to hold the disdain for the tears. No, I do hold disdain for them - each and every one that seems to flow so frequently these days. This is an inspirational piece, that at first I thought presented those who give into the melancholy and the tears in a negative light. This is not about them, though. This is about you. This is your fight and how you have struggled not to give into all the negative and how you have been of stalwart soul enough to rise above all the melodrama and the crocodile tears. Yes, this is an inspirational piece - it is almost a prayer of serenity in its own right. While it may be too late for some of us as we drown in the muck, this piece is enough to crack our hardened frown with the slightest hint of a smile for those that have managed to rise above it and get away. Excellent piece...

[Celtic Cat]

Most triumphant!!! Excellent write! Oh... how many of us cling to the tools of the weak instead of reaching for the tools of the strong. I love this piece, you tell it like it is.... and we can all relate.... although we don't all get to dance under the moon... in this piece... I feel like I just did!! Very, very good!!

[Antony]

Bright Eyes, this is beautifully done in all that it says. The man in the moon smiles as he sees you reach the top, his wisdom heard and with that you are able to go forward in happiness, sheding the hurt and the tears, becoming once more reassured that your heart still beats, that there is hope for your future and so you dance, a confident self reflection.
Antony

[Emily B]

A song for the strong, the defiant ones.